"The video places the three performing artists" → "The video places the three rappers"
Done
Shouldn't the song's challenge be mentioned in the lead after the music video?
Done
Writing and production
"The song's
instrumental was produced by" → "The song was produced by"
Done
"Go Grizzly, and Mally Mall." → "Go Grizzly and Mally Mall."
Done
Remove introduction and wikilink for Smokepurpp
Done
"a
chorus and a verse" remove this part, as the source mentions that KSI wrote those parts at the time and not Smokepurpp
Timwikisidemen I have altered this part to be accurate, as Smokepurpp had wrote and recorded but it is not sourced that it was a chorus and verse. Regarding the other two unresolved points, I used the same type of alteration for them. --
K. Peake10:00, 13 January 2021 (UTC)reply
Remove introduction and target for KSI
Done
"was played the instrumental with Smokepurpp's chorus and verse during a" → "was played the instrumental during a"
The source does not mention the session being in Los Angeles, unless it is worded in a way that is unobvious to spot which I missed?
Timwikisidemen, the above issues are the only ones that have not been fixed and for more context, you need to remove the introductions because they have already been identified as American rappers in the lead, plus the target is redundant for KSI because he is the main artist; I guess you can get away with keeping the wikilinks for the others though since they are featured, while removing the introductions. As for the other points arisen, the info is not sourced hence my suggestions. --
K. Peake21:43, 12 January 2021 (UTC)reply
"KSI wrote and recorded a
pre-chorus" → "KSI wrote and recorded both a
chorus" with the target
Done
Remove target on feature
Done
Remove introduction and wikilink for Lil Pump
Done
"therefore, "it made" → "therefore "it made"
Done
Music and lyrics
"track with elements of" → "track, with elements of"
Done
The verse-chorus form and the song's length are both unsourced
You should mention the bass production of the song per
24
Remove target on soundtrack
Done
Remove wikilink on lyrics
Done
"are all about flexing," → "centre around flexing,"
Done
Remove wikilink on jewellery
Done
Release and promotion
"On the same day, he posted" → "Simultaneously, he posted"
Done
Remove wikilink on cover art
Done
"and it features Lil Pump and" → "and features Lil Pump and"
Done
Remove wikilink on cartoon
Done
"from KSI's upcoming debut studio album," → "from KSI's debut studio album"
Done
Remove target on Dissimulation
Done
"to write and record their own verse" → "to record their own verse"
"of KSI's upcoming debut studio album." → "of the album." since his debut is the most recent album mentioned
Done
[17][7] should be put in numerical order
Done
"on 4 April and 9 April," → "on 4 April and 9 April 2020,"
Done
"for the public poll which" → "for the public poll, which"
Done
Critical reception
Retitle to Reception and merge with commercial performance, placing the latter as the bottom para here since both sections are too short at one para each
Done
"received positive reviews" → "was met with positive reviews"
Cite GRM Daily as publisher instead for ref 24 and fix MOS:QWQ issues
Done
Cite Official Charts Company as publisher instead for ref 33
Done
Cite Tidal as publisher instead for ref 35
Done
External links
Good
Final comments and verdict
On hold until the issues are all fixed; I did notice that you have made improvements as an editor since my last review for you but the main problem with this article is the amount of original research. --
K. Peake09:53, 11 January 2021 (UTC)reply