Hi, I'd like some feedback of my copy edit of Suguru Geto. You can see the comparison of the original versus my revisions here. Thank you in advance. 123Writer talk 17:08, 4 September 2023 (UTC)
If the article is from the GOCE Requests page, place *R (using plain text) after the word count. If it was tagged in XXXXX and XXXXX, place *O (using plain text) after the word count.
What do the X's mean? I think the X's are meant to be changed to whatever the date range is, right?
123Writer
talk 01:49, 5 September 2023 (UTC)
Courtesy link: Technological revolution I'd like some feedback on this article, if anyone is free to do so. It was tagged as a personal essay, which I think I changed most of, but I'm still not entirely sure if the tone is neutral enough. 267 03:55, 11 September 2023 (UTC)
"They have been shown to increase productivity and efficiency". Starting two consecutive sentences with "It" isn't ideal, but it agrees better with
"A technological revolution"at the beginning of the paragraph. All the best, Mini apolis 20:01, 11 September 2023 (UTC)
For Nakkeeran Gopal, I would like some feedback for my copyedit, as I am not sure if the tone can be considered encyclopedic. Mox Eden ( talk) 13:22, 14 September 2023 (UTC)
Hi, I joined GOCE last month and began work on some of the articles in Category:Wikipedia articles needing copy edit from August 2022. I managed to eliminate three from the category and also made some progress with 2013–14 FC Basel season. I have been unavailable since the end of August and could not join this drive until now. I'm still not fully available but, last week, I saw the FC Basel article in my watchlist and was glad someone else was working on it. However, after checking the changes made by User:Area 51 Machan (A51), I had no alternative but to undo their edits and comment that a great deal of proofreading and copyediting is still required. The article had been removed from the August 2022 category and I have reinstated it. As I am interested in football, I will continue to develop the article when time allows.
This morning, I checked A51's edits again and I remain convinced that I was right to revert. I can give detailed reasons if necessary. I was by now aware of the drive so I thought I should look at A51's other contributions because, obviously, the whole point of the drive is to IMPROVE the articles, not make them worse. A51 has also edited
Sultan Bathery, although that is in a later GOCE category, and has removed its copyedit template. To provide you with an example of the quality of his copyediting work (
diff), he changed a sentence in the opening paragraph of the lead to It is one of Keralam's cleanest town.
He also reduced the second paragraph to a single sentence which reads: Once known as a strategic location for defense in the Malabar region,it isnow known for its tourism and commercial activities.
I've copyedited this article myself.
Adiramapattinam railway station, a very short stub, required attention from User:Mox Eden to fix A51's errors, especially in the lead paragraph. This article is now in good shape after Mox's work.
In
Captain (2022 film), A51 has written Gourav patidar produced the film through his studio
The Show People, with association of Think Studios and SNS Movie Production LLP
and The Film earned 1000 crores in boxoffice from India
. Again, aside from his own errors, the article needs much more work before it can be delisted. I have reverted
his edit because it will be easier to copyedit the previous version.
In
this edit, A51 has altered the second sentence in the lead section of
R. Madhesh from the acceptable He is mainly known for his debut film
Madhurey (2004) and
Vijayakanth's 150th film
Arasangam (2008).
to the convoluted and incorrect He entered the film industry through the tamil film
Madhurey (2004) and is mainly known for
Arasangam (2008) which was
Vijayakanth's 150th film.
In all these cases, A51 provides "updated" as his edit summary. This tells the reader nothing at all. He should be saying that he is copyediting the article as part of the GOCE drive and should certainly say he has removed the copyedit or grammar template whenever he has done so.
You rightly say in your conditions that participants must be competent in their use of English grammar, spelling and punctuation. Sorry if I seem harsh, but allowing someone like A51 to participate is completely defeating the object of the drive. PearlyGigs ( talk) 10:36, 18 September 2023 (UTC)
First-timer here. Could someone please provide feedback on my CE of Evgenia Antipova? I can't put my finger on it but something about it feels off. -- Nsophiay ( talk) 23:03, 18 September 2023 (UTC)
She was known for her genre compositions, portraits, landscapes, and still life paintings, which she created using oils and watercolours. Among her favourite themes were apple orchards and Crimean landscapes.I'm not sure how to make the
oils and watercolourspart fit in. Thanks for taking a look! -- Nsophiay ( talk) 16:17, 19 September 2023 (UTC)
Almost all of the June and July requests are answered, and the drive ends in about eight days. TarantulaTM ( speak with me) ( my legacy) 00:59, 23 September 2023 (UTC)