I done some major work on this article and would like advice and comments. Looking to resubmit this artilce for Good Article Review. Thanks
Shinerunner 17:11, 5 August 2007 (UTC)reply
LuciferMorgan
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Citations need formatting. Done
Trivia section needs zapping. Any worthwhile info must be integrated into the article, or ridden of. Done
External link farm needs pruning. Done
Verifiability needs to be improved, possibly through the use of citations. Done
Thanks for the advice, I'm starting to verify statements through alternate sources.
Shinerunner 21:39, 7 August 2007 (UTC)reply
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Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at
Wikipedia:Lead. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on
WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.[?] Done
If there is not a
free use image in the top right corner of the article, please try to find and include one.[?] Done
Per
Wikipedia:Manual of Style (numbers), there should be a non-breaking space - between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 100 miles, use 100 miles, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 100 miles.[?]
Per
Wikipedia:Manual of Style (headings), headings generally do not start with articles ('the', 'a(n)'). For example, if there was a section called ==The Biography==, it should be changed to ==Biography==.[?]
Per
Wikipedia:Manual of Style (headings), headings generally should not repeat the title of the article. For example, if the article was
Ferdinand Magellan, instead of using the heading ==Magellan's journey==, use ==Journey==.[?] Done
Watch for
redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's
redundancy exercises.)
Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”
As done in
WP:FOOTNOTE, footnotes usually are located right after a punctuation mark (as recommended by the
CMS, but not mandatory), such that there is no space in between. For example, the sun is larger than the moon [2]. is usually written as the sun is larger than the moon.[2][?] Done