No Way Out (2004)
- A script has been used to generate a semi- automated review of the article for issues relating to grammar and house style; it can be found on the automated peer review page for September 2008.
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I've listed this article for peer review because after failing FAC twice earlier in the year, I want to send it back to FAC to make sure it passes. To do this, I want a peer review to see any problems that stand out. Hopefully third time is a charm. :)
Thanks, S R X 02:06, 23 September 2008 (UTC)
Giggy, images
- Ideally, the old versions of Image:2004NoWayOut.jpg would be deleted. You can use {{ fair use reduced}} (check if you need to subst it, I'm not sure).
Other images seem fine. Ping me and I'll give some more comments at some point. Giggy ( talk) 02:15, 23 September 2008 (UTC)
The image of Rikishi: The caption says, "Rikishi, who teamed up with Scotty 2 Hotty to take on and Shaniqua." Something is missing/wrong here. iMatthew ( talk) 09:45, 23 September 2008 (UTC)
ThinkBlue's comments
- In the Eddie/Brock feud, why is "Champion" capitalized?
- Add an exclamation point after "SmackDown" in the Triple Threat info.
- In the Rey/Chavo feud, "Crossroads" is not suppose to be italicized.
- In the Main event matches section, move the image of Chavo to the right, per here.
- This is me, but "619" and the "FU" still are moves used by Rey and Cena; "called" ---> "calls"?
- In the Aftermath, the Bash '04 has an article created.
- Same section, the WWE title is not the world heavyweight title.
- I'm referencing the WWE title as a " World Heavyweight Championship."
- Same section, no need repetition of full name, ex: John Cena.
- If I had to do it, so do you; "WWE" ---> "World Wrestling Entertainment".
Here are my comments. -- ThinkBlue (Hit BLUE) 23:51, 23 September 2008 (UTC)
Nikki's comments
Found some time to review and copyedit this. ;)
- "Including its promotional buildup, No Way Out grossed over $450,000 ticket sales from an attendance of approximately 11,000 and received 350,000 pay-per-view buys." - I think the wording of sentences similar to this has been discussed before, but I'm too busy to look it up, so I'll just give my thoughts: it reads terribly. Did it gross money during the promotional buildup? Or did the opposite occur (spending money to promote)? The sentence would read better without the clause before the comma (beginning the sentence with No Way Out) and still retain the 'intended' meaning.
- "The name of a wrestler's character was not always the person's birth name, as wrestlers often use a stage name to portray their character." - This sentence seems out of place. I'd say that can be figured out by the name linking. Did someone tell you to add that as part of a review?
- "Sit there and be the bitch that you are" - This needs a punctuation mark of some kind, either a "." or "..."
- "The Big Show used his body size to his advantage" - Might be good to give some specifics here just for the visual imagery
I've watchlisted this page, so I'll know when you've replied. Nikki 311 02:16, 25 September 2008 (UTC)