While the lead needs rewriting, the third paragraph, "Irankunda was announced to join Bayern Munich in July 2024 for an undisclosed fee, presumably, breaking the A-League transfer record " is too short and should be merged with the fourth one.
This line, "Born in Tanzania, Irankunda has represented Australia at youth level" should go to the second paragraph. Second paragraph is the line after the infobox
Also add the Tanzania part where he was born and link them. Safari ScribeEdits!Talk! 14:57, 27 April 2024 (UTC)reply
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SafariScribe Thanks for your comment. I have reworded the lead according to your views.
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JC Kotisow: It has been a month since the last comment. Are you ready to nominate this article at FAC, or are you still looking for comments?
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Z1720 I'm still looking for comments for improvement but I might jus nominate again
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JC Kotisow: I suggest seeking a
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