Expand the lede per
WP:LEDE; perhaps link/elaborate on "ultraportable" in the lede (if there's no link, try "ultraportable laptop" or something to that effect)
"The current model has a low voltage, small form factor Core 2 Duo "Penryn" with 6MB of cache, running on a 1066 MHz bus."--any way to link the last bit, or elaborate on cache/bus, etc. I understand it, but some may not.
"Unlike the rest of the MacBook family, the MacBook Air has no directly user-replaceable parts."--what does directly mean here, as it seems the battery is replacable, and the HD as well?
NBattery cannot be replaced, hard drive upgraded. Will clarify.--
moɳo 03:41, 22 May 2010 (UTC)reply
I'm sure there's more you can add to "Environmental considerations"
"The flip-down hatch is a tight fit for some headphone plugs and USB devices, requiring users to purchase an extension cable."--what hatch is this, now?
See image. Will clarify and reword.--
moɳo 03:41, 22 May 2010 (UTC)reply
Not sure how many; will look up.--
moɳo 03:41, 22 May 2010 (UTC)reply
"Several[quantify] MacBook Air users[26] since the release of the first-generation product have complained of overheating causing CPU lockup. ." should be "Since the release of the first-generation product, several[quantify] MacBook Air users[26] have complained of overheating that caused CPU lockup."
These are just some things that would be good to see in a GA that FC might not have touched on already:
If you could, try to fill out this article with more writing. This can be done by adding reception section(s) and details on each release.
Generally, a section or subsection is expected to have more than just a meager sentence (such as in
MacBook Air#Security). Try filling out or combining extremely short few-sentence paragraphs as they tend to break up the flow of prose. See
here as well as
here for some more info.
I believe the lead still needs expansion. Once the article is filled out, you should ideally have two solid paragraphs for the intro.
Airplaneman ✈ 03:12, 23 May 2010 (UTC)reply
More: I'm adding citation needed tags to the article as needed so it doesn't need to happen at during a GAN. I've also cleaned up and used {{
Cite mac}} in the Specifications section.
Airplaneman ✈ 22:57, 8 June 2010 (UTC)reply
Bleeding Edge (31) is reliable how? The url says it's in a blog archive
Done
please get consistency! Especially accessdates--got some 25 May 2010, some 2010-05-25, and some May 25, 2010. Citation templates do the YYYY-MM-DD iirc.
Done as YYYY-MM-DD. --mono 21:05, 2 June 2010 (UTC)reply
A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with
the layout style guideline:
B.
Reliable sources are
cited inline. All content that
could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose):