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Ruhrfisch comments: Here are some suggestions for improvement, mostly language nitpicks.
Awkward sentence The team joined the NBA in 1989 as an expansion team with the Orlando Magic.[2] I think it means The team was one of two expansion teams that joined the NBA in 1989 (the other was Orlando Magic).[2]
I am not 100% clear what this means The Timberwolves has never been in the NBA Finals since its inception.[3] Is this the team's inception, or the inception of the NBA Finals (how I read it, but this does not make sense)?
How about combining these sentences to something like There have been eight head coaches for the Timberwolves; the first was Bill Musselman, who coached for two seasons.
McHale's winning percentage seems to be the only record statistic not quoted in the lead - why not include it too?
I would add "playoffs" to this sentence to make it clearer Saunders is the only head coach to have been to the playoffs with the Timberwolves, with a [playoffs] record of 47 games and 17 wins.
Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at
Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours,
Ruhrfisch><>°° 03:28, 30 May 2009 (UTC)reply
Done all. Thanks for the suggestion, but articles are too big for me to peer review, and I, to be honest, am very lazy (as some can tell...) -- [[
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