General reviews please, I think this article is nearly ready for a FA push. Thanks in advance, any comments greatfully welcome. –
MDCollins (talk) 10:06, 28 May 2007 (UTC)reply
Only my third review, but I may make some suggestions
May I suggest merging (with other sections) stubby sections including
2005–6 tour of the subcontinent
Awards for performances in 2005
In the infobox, for sections "5 wickets in a innings" and "10 in a match", it would be better to have "0" rather thatn a dash (unless the dash indicates information that is unknown)
Same with stumpings
There are often parts of the article that have - "27*" or "108*", non-cricketors would not know what this is, it would be better to say "not out".
It's faily well sourced but some sentences (in my opinion) need to be sourced
"Pietersen was selected for the full England one-day side to tour Zimbabwe and South Africa in 2004–05."
"Pietersen was added to the one-day squad to face South Africa. He was subjected to a barrage of abuse from the South African crowd, who regarded him somewhat like a traitor."
"Born of an English mother and a South African father, Pietersen attended Maritzburg College in Pietermaritzburg."
The achievements section looks messy.
In the "Achievements" section, you may intergrate the records and awards into a written section rather than dot points.
Is it really necassary to have every man of the match performance?
1. Done - Addressed, there is one small section that probably needs expansion rather than merging - I've placed a template there for reference.
2., 3. and 6. Pause for thought - Just following a comparative Featured Article (
Paul Collingwood) and the standard infobox developed by
WP Cricket - perhaps these comments should be addressed there, if you don't mind I'll leave it as it is for a moment until we get further comment.
4. Done - I've altered this in the prose, in tables * should suffice.
I brought these issues up with the
WP:CRICKET team, and we've come up with the idea that if, for example, a regular bowler hasn't taken 10wkts, a 0 shall be used, and if it is unlikely that a part-time bowler will do so, – will suffice. Same goes for stumpings (KP isn't a wicketkeeper so 0 seems a bit unfair).
As for the achivements, nobody seemed to comment,
Paul Collingwood became FA with something similar, and all the records are in the prose. If you've any further comments, the article is now a Featured article candidate, and another review would be most welcome.
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Please expand the lead to conform with guidelines at
Wikipedia:Lead. The article should have an appropriate number of paragraphs as is shown on
WP:LEAD, and should adequately summarize the article.[?]
See if possible if there is a
free use image that can go on the top right corner of this article.[?]There's one in the infobox–
MDCollins (talk) 00:28, 30 May 2007 (UTC)reply
If this article is about a person, please add {{persondata|PLEASE SEE [[WP:PDATA]]!}} along with the required parameters to the article - see
Wikipedia:Persondata for more information.[?]Done–
MDCollins (talk) 00:28, 30 May 2007 (UTC)reply
Per
Wikipedia:Manual of Style (headings), headings generally do not start with articles ('the', 'a(n)'). For example, if there was a section called ==The Biography==, it should be changed to ==Biography==.[?]Removed–
MDCollins (talk) 00:28, 30 May 2007 (UTC)reply