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I'm going on vacation and thus can't respond to more comments.
MPJ-DK (
talk) 14:06, 30 April 2009 (UTC)reply
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This peer review discussion has been closed.
I've listed this article for peer review because I've been working on expanding it and getting the best possible sources in the hopes of making it the first Lucha Libre article to reach GA status and who knows, maybe even FA status one day. I'm hoping people will give me constructive feedback to improve the article and I will listen to everything and anything. Since English isn't my primary language any copyedit review comments would be greatly appreciated, but all comments are welcome.
Thanks in advance,
MPJ-DK (
talk) 05:09, 18 April 2009 (UTC)reply
I've addressed the following automated review comments
Person data
Contractions
I've yet to work on the lead, but I'm on it now, also the fact that "Abismo Negro" is both the article title and a headline is unavoidable.
MPJ-DK (
talk) 09:24, 27 April 2009 (UTC)reply
Comments from Nikki
Use endashes (–) between dates instead of dashes (-). For more, see
WP:DASH.
"made him visibly very striking" - sounds like original research or POV
I didn't actually come up with the expression on my own, it was from a wrestling magazine that did a tribute article on him. I added the source to prevent any misunderstandings over the use of the term.
MPJ-DK (
talk) 09:24, 27 April 2009 (UTC)reply
In the "Outside the ring" section, all the sentences start with his name. Mixing it up would make it sound better.
You say "a cheating bad guy (referred to as a heel)" in this section. I personally think it would make more sense to call him the Mexican version (rudo, I think), as you said technico, not face, earlier in the article.
Done and very good point.
MPJ-DK (
talk) 09:38, 27 April 2009 (UTC)reply
Change "recent Vipers member" to "new Vipers member"
"was sent to a tour with Pro Wrestling Noah" should either be "was sent on a tour with Pro Wrestling Noah" or "was sent to tour with Pro Wrestling Noah".