The article was archived by Laser brain via FACBot ( talk) 23:54, 16 May 2016 [1].
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Ellie is the deuteragonist and secondary playable character in the 2013 video game The Last of Us, developed by Naughty Dog and published by Sony Computer Entertainment. The character of Ellie is significant for the medium, as video games seldom feature such strong female characters. The design of the character was well-documented throughout development, and was very well-received after the game's launch, receiving high praise from critics. I wrote this article during my crazy The Last of Us project last year, and after feedback and changes from other editors, I feel satisfied that it is well-written and meets the featured article criteria. – Rhain ☔ 07:15, 26 March 2016 (UTC) reply
Oppose A lot of work has clearly gone into this article, but I'm afraid the structure and prose aren't of FA standard at present. I'm not familiar with these games or the character, and found that the structure didn't help me understand them. The prose is consistently overly-wordy, and the topics of paragraphs jump around a lot. The article would be much improved by a copy edit that focuses on condensing the wording (just say what happened, use active not passive tense where possible, strip out unnecessary quotes and details and check for duplication), improves the flow of the paragraphs' wording and restructures the article so it explains the character before getting into the details of how she was developed and portrayed. I have the following specific comments on the lead and first section which I hope illustrate these concerns:
As per all my reviews. I always go through and do some copy/editing.
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Character design
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Reception
Coordinator note: This nomination seems to have stalled and there is no consensus for promotion after almost two months. Therefore, I will be archiving the nomination. -- Laser brain (talk) 23:54, 16 May 2016 (UTC) reply