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This is excellent!
I never even considered that there might be laws about rainwater harvesting! 67 pages from the CMHC alone!
Be sure to mention freezing problems.
Rosieredfield ( talk) 00:29, 5 February 2016 (UTC)
Comments from Ruth Yes this is really good, Canada deserves its own page. You need to think a little about images for the article. I assume the one you have already in your outline is from Wikimedia Commons? You could also take some of your own. RuthVancouver ( talk) 21:02, 7 February 2016 (UTC)
Your page is looking great! -Just a slight error in the paragraph under Residental heading.
-It was good to mention that UBC CIRS as an example, I definitely think it is worth to mention other places or building in Canada that are already part-taking in rainwater harvesting. Since you guys do have a heading for application of rainwater harvesting in Canada it would be great to include where in Canada is this used for agriculture, as well which industry, which residences? Maybe even some data or percentile.
-Especially since this page is a standalone page, it would be nice to have a few more pictures!!
-Overall, I think you guys did a really good job!!!
— Preceding unsigned comment added by Beeeckytan ( talk • contribs) 07:05, 22 March 2016 (UTC)
-I really like your formatting of your article, it looks very professional!
-Its good, Canada should have its own page and if you follow the format the main rainwater harvesting page does it should look great
-Small editing errors under your residential subheading
-For such a broader topic, it would be nice to see more sources and information…for instance in regards to Canadian company’s implementation on this issue, you may want to look at this for certain “Canadian” capture methods: http://www.fiskars.ca/Customer-Service/FAQs/Product-Specific-Questions/Rainwater-Harvesting-Systems/General
-Maybe see how rainwater capturing plays a role in LEED certifications/Canada Green Building Council
-Personally, I’d like more pictures/images of examples of where rainwater harvesting bylaws can have an effect in your Property Rights section…picture with a small subheading how its related to that particular bylaw — Preceding unsigned comment added by Jameshsin ( talk • contribs) 04:38, 15 March 2016 (UTC)
Overall organization and content:
Integration with other Wikipedia pages?
Standard Wikipedia page layout and organization?
Illustrations:
Suggestions from Ruth and Rosie:
Overall: Really well done! I have outline below some suggested revisions to grammar and content. Photos are great, I like the idea of enlarging them, and possibly adding one that shows a larger scale system well.
Firstly, I'm not sure why the first few sentences are duplicated under your first heading. If both of these sections will be in your final wikipedia page take out duplications.
Section 1: Awkward: "Rainwater harvesting is becoming a procedure that many Canadians are incorporating into their daily lives" could change it to, "A number of Canadians have started implementing rainwater harvesting systems". It would be awesome to know how many are, or if number have increased as of late.
"There are a number of benefits to rainwater capture other than it being free of cost"....I would change this to "In addition to low costs, rainwater harvesting
carries many additional benefits." This puts emphasis on low cost as well as other benefits rather than diminishing the weight of cost effectivity. Also, it's not free because you have to get the barrels!
"the cost to distribute it is low and it is useful for landscape irrigation"- change "it" to "the rain water" In the next sentence you re state the benefit of storm water capture which you have already outlined. I think this paragraph needs some attention to make it a stronger opener. In your last sentence you refer to legislation but not specifically what the legislation is about. The earlier section speaks to this law so it could be okay if you are keeping that section, but at the same time then you are repeating yourself completely. Again, I think there is a need to reassess these first two blocks of text so you have a strong opener.
Section 2:
"right to harvest and own water from the sky, as well as further uses" -what do you mean by this, consider revising to the right to harvest and use rainwater". I think "water from the sky" is too creative language for wikipedia.
I think your article gets much stronger here, showing your research into different provinces. Wording is vague around B.C. e.g. "appears" and "likely", is there a way for you to get a more definitive answer and be able to convey that?
"reach below zero", change to "drops below zero" or at least change to "reaches"
awkward: "to avoid the water from freezing in the pipe" could change to "to avoid freezing of the water in the pipe system"
Section 3:
I think you should add more about agricultural uses because this could be of huge ecological benefit.
"up to 75 to 40,000 litres of wate", remove "up to" or change to "can hold up to 40,000" -again you need an -es on reaches
-green roofs can also be used commercially/industrially -I agree with Annalise that examples and pictures are great, add more!
Closing: I think this area could be strengthened as well. Speak more to potential challenges and benefits of rainwater harvesting. The Okanagen example seems a bit out of the blue. You could intro it by saying "One example of a community that has come face to face with water shortages is the Okanagan in B.C." (you don't necessarily need to describe the Okanagan because you can simply link to their page so people can see it's location etc.
I would not end on the note of the Okanagan. Following that example I would return to the overall context of Canada and use a concluding statement, perhaps referencing our potential to continue being a provider of global fresh water by maintaining supplies through rainwater harvesting. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Asiawilcox ( talk • contribs) 21:19, 22 March 2016 (UTC)
You've done a wonderful job, as have your reviewers, but there is still lots of room for polishing and fine-tuning.
Lead section: I suspect that the first three paragraphs (before Property Rights) are intended to be a Lead section. Reformat them accordingly.
Organization of information within paragraphs: For example, the first paragraph repeats information in confusing ways.
Sentence structure: Many sentences are awkwardly worded. Have a couple of friends who are good writers read the text and suggest improvements.
Law of Capture: Explain briefly what this is, and link to the Wikipedia Rule of Capture page.
Links: You haven't created any links from other pages to your new page - how will people find it? Only the first uses of 'rainwater' and 'rainwater capture' should link to those Wikipedia pages.
Sandbox box: Remove the 'This is a sandbox' box from the bottom of the page.
Rosieredfield ( talk) 17:37, 27 March 2016 (UTC)
Comments on latest version! Great page! Good job! However a couple of things could be improved.
Note The Wikipedia bot has put this at the top of your page "This article uses bare URLs for citations, which may be threatened by link rot. Please consider adding full citations so that the article remains verifiable.Several templates and the reFill tool are available to assist in formatting". You better correct this soon before the Wikipedia bot deletes stuff!
RuthVancouver ( talk) 23:15, 29 March 2016 (UTC)
You've done a lot of excellent work - congratulations!
That said, the writing is still often awkward and wordy, and the page contains a lot of general information that's not specific to Canada. But these issues can be left for other editors to correct. Rosieredfield ( talk) 19:48, 14 April 2016 (UTC)
I was skimming around random articles and found this, and it got me curious-Do they harvest rainwater in the United States too? JTZegers ( talk) 13:12, 13 May 2020 (UTC)