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Bush administration reprisals?

User:132.241.245.49 has added Category:Targets of alleged Bush administration reprisals to this article. Mel Carnahan died in October 2000 and the Bush administration did not begin until January 2001. Therefore, I don't understand how this category could possibly be applicable. I'm also not certain what alleged incidents, the tag refers to. Do other editors have thoughts on this matter? TMS63112 07:17, 12 February 2006 (UTC) reply


The above is simply "Bush bashing" and political sour grapes.

In the Political career there is no mention of the covert Proposition B campaign and his pledge to remain neutral. Or that Judith Moriarty (Secretary of State) was impeached and his appointment of Rebecca Cook in 1994.

It was the first time that a dead man had ever been elected to Senate. Mrs. Carnahan appointment to the Senate was allowed without protest?

Legal action taken by Jean Carnahan (plane crash) to later finance the political ambitions? Which friendly judge heard that case?

Instrument rated pilot flying out of a rain storm can't read the properly functioning instruments?


ArmedCitizen 13:48, 30 August 2006 (UTC) reply

The legal procedure was followed in 2000. No protests would have been valid. As the entry states, it was too late to remove Carnahan from the ballot, and the procedure in place was for the Lt Gov to appoint if necessary. Some have commented that the Lt. Governor wasn't required to appoint Jean Carnahan, and the promise before the election that he would do that was just that -- a promise. One he did not break, though. Any conspiracy theories regarding Jean Carnahan would belong on her talk page. Gavroche42 03:48, 13 March 2007 (UTC) reply

References

Hi. This article needs to conform to Wikipedia requirements re: references/sources - one external link about the plane crash is not enough. Then perhaps someone might assess the article, but not until then. I've put a tag in the article, which can be removed when references are supplied. Thanks. Ref (chew) (do) 21:50, 26 February 2008 (UTC) reply

I have added a link to the Missouri State Treasurer's Biography on Mel Carnahan which appears to verify at least some of the information in this article. -- TommyBoy ( talk) 06:21, 4 March 2008 (UTC) reply
Following up on my addition of a reference for this article, I have tagged the article for lack of in-line citations because I am not well-versed in the formatting of in-line citations on Wikipedia. If another user more familiar with that process could add in-line citations using the reference I provided, I would appreciate it. -- TommyBoy ( talk) 06:49, 4 March 2008 (UTC) reply
With only a single reference to cover all the information in the article, it's impossible to inline it. It's formatted correctly until such time as alternative or extra references are found.
Also, did you realise that the death date in the article (unsourced) was October 16, 2000? The death date according to the reference is October 17, 2000, and I have amended the article accordingly. If anyone believes that it was the 16th they can change it back, but only if they insert a really reliable reference to support it. Thanks. Ref (chew) (do) 12:22, 7 March 2008 (UTC) reply

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Senator/Senator-elect

Mel Carnahan was never a United States Senator-elect, much less a Senator. Upon certification that a dead person had received a plurality, the seat was declared vacant. Trying to shoehorn that into an elected office infobox is cute, but not factual. As a result, it has no place here. Carnahan is not the only person to have died or refused office after election to the Senate, and none of them have it noted in the infobox. Treatment in the article is good enough. - Rrius ( talk) 21:08, 9 April 2009 (UTC) reply

Carnahan's Deathplace

I noticed that there is an inconsistency in this article regarding Carnahan's deathplace. The InfoBox lists the Jefferson County town of Goldman, but the article text states that the plane crash in which Carnahan died in occurred near the Jefferson County cities of Pevely and Hillsboro. I had considered changing both the InfoBox and article text to reflect that he died in Jefferson County without any specific mention of nearby cities or towns, but decided to get a second opinion from my fellow Wikipedians before doing so. -- TommyBoy ( talk) 06:46, 24 January 2012 (UTC) reply

The mention of the towns of Pevely and Hillsboro has been removed from the article by an unregisted user, and his deathplace is listed as Jefferson County without any specific mention of a city or town in his Missouri State Treasurer biography, so I will update the article accordingly. -- TommyBoy ( talk) 02:43, 2 February 2012 (UTC) reply

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Some basic feedback

@ FountofInterestingInfo: Pretty close to B class, imo, but the lead and some sections could use a bit of expansion, if possible. A large amount of the sources are linked to their archive, instead of the original URL, so that should also be fixed. ARandomName123 ( talk)Ping me! 19:49, 13 September 2023 (UTC) reply

@ ARandomName123: I've fixed the links and expanded the article a fair bit. FountofInterestingInfo ( talk) 02:46, 15 September 2023 (UTC) reply
Pretty good! ORES gives an assessment of 69% GA, and the article looks pretty clean, so with a few minor adjustments, the article should be good enough to be nominated as a GA, if you choose to do so.
A few minor suggestions:
- A large amount of the newspaper sources use the cite book template instead of cite news. This is relatively easy to fix, iirc, you just replace the book in {{cite book... with {{cite news...
- The final sentence in "Early life and education" needs a source
- Subsection title should use sentence case per MOS:SECTION
- Watch words like "tragically", but again, this problem isn't that prevalent.
- Awards and recognition section could use more expansion, but I understand that this may not be possible
If you need help on any of this, feel free to ask me or other editors. Good job so far! ARandomName123 ( talk)Ping me! 03:23, 15 September 2023 (UTC) reply
I think I've addressed all these concerns. Thank you for your continued feedback. It's truly helped to enhance this article beyond what I thought possible. If there's anything else you could suggest or think that I need to fix, let me know. FountofInterestingInfo ( talk) 05:25, 15 September 2023 (UTC) reply
A few sources need some minor rearrangements. If they have a full date in "Year of publication", it should be moved to "Source date". If their author name is given as "Associated Press" or other non-name, it should be moved to "agency". The name of the newspaper should be in "Name of publication" instead of "Publisher".
I've done this change to Early life and education, and State legislator, so you can look there for an example.
Other than that, the article looks fine. I'll take a look at the other article you put up for assessment when I get the time. ARandomName123 ( talk)Ping me! 13:32, 15 September 2023 (UTC) reply
I think I fixed everything you said. I will also do it for the other article too since I know a bit more what to do now. FountofInterestingInfo ( talk) 18:09, 15 September 2023 (UTC) reply
Looks good, upping rating from C-class to B-class. ARandomName123 ( talk)Ping me! 19:08, 15 September 2023 (UTC) reply
Awesome. Do you think it could be nominated as GA Class? FountofInterestingInfo ( talk) 19:19, 15 September 2023 (UTC) reply
I'd say go for it! Even if it doesn't work out, you'll get some valuable feedback. You can use User:SD0001/GAN-helper to easily create a nomination. Good luck! ARandomName123 ( talk)Ping me! 19:31, 15 September 2023 (UTC) reply
I will do it. Thank you again for your feedback and edits. Without it, this would not have been possible. FountofInterestingInfo ( talk) 19:52, 15 September 2023 (UTC) reply

GA Review

Unsuccessful. Thebiguglyalien ( talk) 16:44, 15 October 2023 (UTC) reply

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Reviewer: Thebiguglyalien ( talk · contribs) 06:20, 9 October 2023 (UTC) reply


Hello! I'll write up a review for this article within the next few days, and then we can see what it still needs to meet the good article criteria. Thebiguglyalien ( talk) 06:20, 9 October 2023 (UTC) reply

FountofInterestingInfo, I've done the sourcing portion of the review, and there's a problem that needs to be addressed. The use of newspaper sources means that they only describe the individual events, but they don't provide context, and they can't be used to establish a pattern because they don't describe one explicitly. I go into more detail about this below. You'll need to go through the article to make sure it only says what the sources say without adding any additional facts, making any inferences, or analyzing them yourself in any way. I suggest we close the review for now so that you can do this at your leisure, and then you can renominate once you're sure that every part of the article corresponds to a source. Thebiguglyalien ( talk) 22:28, 9 October 2023 (UTC) reply
Hi. I did make a few of the changes to the highlighted sections below. I'm sure that won't be it and I'm not going to resubmit it yet. I will try to check the sources in the next few days and hopefully we can get this done soon. Thanks for agreeing to edit this. FountofInterestingInfo ( talk) 23:03, 9 October 2023 (UTC) reply
@ Thebiguglyalien Hi. I've combed through the article again and caught a few mistakes. I have fixed them, and checked to make sure each source said what was being attributed to it. I also added new sources from journals and books. So that should round the article out a bit. I also fixed the specific instances you mentioned down below and reduced any possible original research. I think I fixed many of the issues you mentioned. If you could give the article a second look so we can take the next steps, or potentially find what else needs fixing, I'd appreciate that.
Also, another person and I had a discussion down below over whether the info box should mention he was elected posthumously. If you have any insight on that issue, I'd appreciate you sharing it. FountofInterestingInfo ( talk) 00:26, 15 October 2023 (UTC) reply
I'll look over it again soon and see if the sourcing issues have been fixed. If they have, then I'll review the rest of the article. Regarding the info box, such a label might be non-standard, but I won't make an issue out of it for GA. Thebiguglyalien ( talk) 00:34, 15 October 2023 (UTC) reply
FountofInterestingInfo, I've looked over the article again, and I found a couple more instances of unsourced statements. But while going over it, I also noticed a bunch of minor prose issues. Articles should usually be given a full copy edit before nomination. I'm going to end the review as unsuccessful. The article certainly isn't bad by any means, it just needs another once over before it's ready for a good article nomination. You can renominate it at any time; if you're interested in nominating it again, it needs to be gone over to make sure every thought expressed by the article is explicitly supported by the citation that comes after it. It also needs a copyedit to make sure that the writing and presentation are in line with the good article standard of "clear, concise, and understandable", preferably without any typographic or formatting issues. If you're not sure what to look for, you can ask the Guild of Copy Editors to take a look at it. You can also post it at peer review to get a second opinion on more specific issues like sourcing, but be aware that it can take a while before those get a response. Thebiguglyalien ( talk) 16:44, 15 October 2023 (UTC) reply
Well-written
Verifiable with no original research
  • All sources appear to be reliable.
  • I ran it through the Earwig copyright violation detector, and it turned up clean.
  • I don't like that most of the sources are decades old. It's preferable to use more recent sources that go through the events to decide what's significant. It can still meet the good article criteria with these sources, but we're limited to simply describing the events. We would need other sources to explain the significance of these events or what effects they had. If you want an example of what I'm talking about, I did a Google Scholar search for sources about Carnahan, and two interesting ones came up: this article about the legality of his senate election and this article that summarizes his career. I haven't read them, but they're the sort of source that's helpful for writing a well-rounded article. These are both behind a paywall at HeinOnline, but once you become more active, you'll qualify for WP:The Wikipedia Library, which will give you access.

Spot checks to ensure the sources support what they're supposed to and to make sure that it's original writing:

  • [2] Belluck (2000):
    • This source doesn't mention "Ellsinore, Missouri", so I'm assuming one of the others do.
    • This source is in front of the following: However, owing to poor weather conditions, the twin-engine Cessna airplane he was flying on, which was piloted by Randy, lost control in rainy and foggy conditions and crashed on a forested hillside near Goldman, Missouri, only about 35 miles (56 km) south of St. Louis. All three on board the plane were killed in the crash. – But there are a lot of details here that the source does not support. For example, how do we know they were in a Cessna?
  • [6] Charton (2000):
    • This uses the exact same phrase as the source: he failed the physical for becoming an Air Force pilot. It should be reworded so it doesn't look like plagiarism.
    • "Improving teacher performances" isn't quite the same thing as "vocational programs and better teacher training".
  • [29] Bulletin Journal (1980) Green tickY
  • [55] The Southeast Missourian (1990) – This is a good example of why newspaper sources aren't always helpful. The newspaper doesn't actually say that it was a frequent cause of conflict or that this is a recurring thing. It just describes one instance. It also doesn't say that this is when it came to a head, because again, it's just describing an isolated event. Based on this source, we don't know about anything related that might have happened before or after the 1990 dispute.
  • [59] Dao (2000) Green tickY
  • [125] STLPR (2002) – I don't see anything here to support 2% margin.

A few more spot checks:

  • [4] Charton (2000) – Checked all five uses. There are multiple claims under "Early life and education" that this does not support.
  • [24] "Carnahan returns to politics after fourteen-year absence". Bulletin Journal (1980) – Checked both uses. Green tickY
  • [67] Stapleton (1993) – This doesn't say when Carnahan was sworn in.
  • [132] Adams (2002) – Checked both uses. Green tickY
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Stable
Illustrated
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Senator-elect in infobox

Is it appropriate (or rather, accurate) to describe Carnahan as a "Senator-elect" in his infobox. Technically he was already dead when he was elected, so I don't know if that label could apply to him. Or at least "died before taking office" should be something like "posthumously elected". estar8806 ( talk) ★ 22:58, 11 October 2023 (UTC) reply

@ Estar8806 That's probably fair. That wording would imply he won and died after that. This article is in the process of a Good Article nomination (see above), so when I make the requested edits in the coming days, I'll change it to posthumously elected, and ask the person reviewing for their take on any further infobox action. FountofInterestingInfo ( talk) 01:55, 12 October 2023 (UTC) reply
Good by me, I was going to change it myself, but saw that this was a GAN right now so I figured I would hold off. estar8806 ( talk) ★ 01:56, 12 October 2023 (UTC) reply

GA Review

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Reviewer: Steelkamp ( talk · contribs) 14:01, 25 March 2024 (UTC) reply

Hello. I aim to get this review done within a week from now. Steelkamp ( talk) 14:01, 25 March 2024 (UTC) reply

@ Steelkamp Hello. I hope I don’t come off as rushing you, but it’s been over a week and there hasn’t been a review yet. Please take as much time as you need, but I just want to check in and see if you will be able to review the article soon. Thank you and all the best. FountofInterestingInfo ( talk) 08:40, 2 April 2024 (UTC) reply
@ Steelkamp Hello again. I want you to know that I have taken your early suggestions and implemented them. I was frankly embarrassed at how I didn't catch some of those mistakes. With that in mind, if it's alright with you, I think I'd like a day to do one more thorough read through and make sure every thing is corrected, and to check other things. I still want to go through with the nomination, but I just want a day to catch any errors and make your life a little easier. Thanks again for the work you've done so far. It's been a great bit of help. FountofInterestingInfo ( talk) 22:32, 4 April 2024 (UTC) reply
Ok. Please ping me when you are ready for me to resume reviewing. Steelkamp ( talk) 02:23, 5 April 2024 (UTC) reply
Hello. It took a little longer than I expected, but it was worth it. I'm ready for the review to resume. Thank you for your patience. FountofInterestingInfo ( talk) 23:16, 8 April 2024 (UTC) reply
Sorry, I'm a bit busy at the moment. I hope to get to this review in the upcoming week. Steelkamp ( talk) 04:02, 14 April 2024 (UTC) reply

Good article criteria

Well written

Lead

  • ...state senate... I would link that to Missouri Senate.
  • After a lengthy absence... I recommend removing this part of the sentence. It's self evident when it says Carnahan returned to politics in 1980.
  • ...state treasurer. I would link this to State Treasurer of Missouri.
  • ...winning an election for the job of lieutenant governor... I recommend shortening to winning an election for lieutenant governor...
  • ...until he was defeated in a bid for the office of governor in 1984. I think this should mention he was defeated in a primary election, not the general election.
  • Governor of Missouri doesn't have to be linked a second time within the lead.
  • Carnahan eventually was elected as a state representative... I think this should be expanded to say Carnahan eventually was elected as a state representative for Phelps County, Missouri...
  • ...concerning education, and taxes... Remove that comma.
  • I think abortion should link to Abortion in Missouri.
  • Can some information from the "Early life and education" section be mentioned in the lead. A good rule of thumb is that something from each major section of the article should be mentioned in the lead.

Early life and education

  • ...representing the eight congressional district... This should be changed to ...representing the eighth congressional district... and Missouri's 8th congressional district should be linked here.
  • A.S.J. Carnahan should be changed to A. S. J. Carnahan for consistency and as per MOS:INITIALS.
  • He moved back there in 1949... I would change this to He moved back to D.C. in 1949...
  • Anacostia High School should be linked.
  • I don't think the initialism "USAF" needs to be said when its not used in the rest of the article. Same with the initialisms "J.D." and "B.A.". Unless the initialism is more well known than the original name (e.g. FBI), the initialisms don't need to be said.

Early political career

  • H.P. Patterson should be changed to H. P. Patterson as per MOS:INITIALS.
  • In 1965, Paterson died... Patterson is misspelled here.

Governor of Missouri

Death and aftermath

Awards and recognitions

Personal life

Verifiable with no original research

Broad in its coverage

Neutral

Stable

Illustrated, if possible

Image copyright is all ok. The only problem is with the alt texts. There is no alt text for the infobox image. With the rest of the images, the alt text could do with some improvement. Generally, its bad if the alt text is essentially repeating the caption. I would change the alt text in those instances to "refer to caption", as it is for the example at Wikipedia:Manual of Style/Accessibility/Alternative text for images#Captions and nearby text.

General

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