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Did you know... that part of capital city Kuala Terengganu's(pictured) name, according to one theory, is derived from terang ganu, Malay for "bright rainbow"?
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Hello there. I'm really sorry for the late reply. I hope you're quite satisfied with the article so far. If anything, I will try to make the article better. Thank you so much. Oh thank you for giving this article the GA opportunity. ^^
Fikku fiq (
talk) 11:48, 9 August 2015 (UTC)reply
Don't worry, there is
WP:NORUSH. Since there have been a number of edits to the article after starting the review, I will re-inspect the article. sovereign°
sentinel(contribs) 12:40, 9 August 2015 (UTC)reply
Per
WP:LEADLENGTH, articles of this size should usually have three to four paragraphs in the lead section. The lead section needs to be expanded. sovereign°
sentinel(contribs) 06:17, 10 August 2015 (UTC)reply
Etymology
"Another story, said to have been originally narrated by the ninth Sultan of Terengganu, Baginda Omar, and what is considered to be the most popular version, tells of a party of hunters from Pahang roving and hunting in the area of what is now southern Terengganu." I would rewrite this into: "Another story, which is considered to be the most popular version, is said to have been originally narrated by the ninth Sultan of Terengganu, Baginda Omar. It tells of a party of hunters from Pahang roving and hunting in the area of what is now southern Terengganu." sovereign°
sentinel(contribs) 06:27, 10 August 2015 (UTC)reply
History
"The Chinese was already present in Kuala Terengganu at that time." - "was" should be changed to "were".
"But, in 1839, Tengku Omar returned to Terengganu with his entourage to reclaim the throne." - I would change "But" to "However".
"As it is the capital of Terengganu, the city is vital to the political and economic welfare of the state." - remove "it is"
"On 16 December 1996, Kuala Terengganu Municipal Council was extended to cover the entire area of Kuala Terengganu district back then, including the famous resort island, Redang Island." - remove "famous" per
WP:PEA
"As the local council for the districts of Kuala Terengganu and Kuala Nerus, and an agency under the Terengganu state government. MBKT is responsible for public health and sanitation, waste removal and management, town planning and beautification, environmental protection and building control, social, economic and tourism development, and general maintenance and constructions of urban infrastructure." - there should be a comma instead of a full stop here.
"Kuala Nerus main centre of population includes Manir and Batu Rakit." - clumsy. I would rewrite it as "The main population centres of Kuala Nerus include Manir and Batu Rakit."
"The Universiti Sultan Zainal Abidin (UniSZA) Teaching Hospital is now under construction, thus providing this district with a new significant establishment." Remove "significant"; readers should be left to decide if a development is significant.
Everything is now changed according to your suggestions. ^^ The lead section is now split into three paragraphs with some additional information.
Fikku fiq (
talk) 13:04, 10 August 2015 (UTC)reply
Geography
Topography and geology
Add the word "the" before "Redang archipelago" and "Redang Islands"
"and are designated as a Marine Park in 1994" - what is a "Marine Park"? This is un-understandable to non-Malaysian readers.
Climate
"'considerable' amount of rain" - what do you mean by "considerable"?
"the sea breeze from South China Sea has somehow moderating the humidity in offshore areas" - somehow moderates
"It is inadvisable to visit" - not advised
In the climate data box, why was the October precipitation and the November precipitation italicized? (I have boldly fixed this)
I've looked at the precipitation data for December 2014, and while MET Malaysia can confirm that the precipitation was above 1,200 mm (way above average), there's no amount written.
Fikku fiq (
talk) 14:06, 10 August 2015 (UTC)reply
"By the 19th century, Kuala Terengganu has become a large and populous town." How is it "large and populous"? Also, "has" here should be "had"
"Thomas John Newbold, an English soldier in the service of the East India Company" - working for
"estimated population of Kuala Terengganu was around" - I would change this to "estimated the population of Kuala Terengganu to be"
"The Chinese settlement in Kuala Terengganu, Kampung Cina, has become an old and established settlement." - had
"Other residents include Non-Malaysian citizens" - non-Malaysian
"Indian (867)" - Indians
I would combine the two paragraphs about data by the 2010 census.
"Mosques and halal food establishments can be found all over the city." - How is this relevant?
"The Malays in Kuala Terengganu speak a distinct Terengganu Malay and is the main lingua franca in the city." - I would rearrange it into "Terengganu Malay is the main lingua franca in the city and is spoken by the Malays in Kuala Terengganu."
Everything's done. (I humbly apologise to you for all those silly grammar mistakes/typos. I should have realised them sooner T3T)
Fikku fiq (
talk) 10:17, 11 August 2015 (UTC)reply
So… before I continue, I think it would be a better idea to first
copyedit the article. Read through the article again, fix any grammatical mistakes/typos you find during the process. sovereign°
sentinel(contribs) 13:11, 11 August 2015 (UTC)reply
OK. I've checked and edited the article. I hope it'll be better this time ^^
Fikku fiq (
talk) 14:25, 11 August 2015 (UTC)reply
Tourism and culture
Attractions and recreation spots
Historical
"The Terengganu State Museum is located in Kampung Losong. It is the largest museum complex in South East Asia with an area of 27 hectares." Please define "South East Asia". This statement is very likely to be challenged, but I will assume that it is cited by sources.
"During the holy month of Ramadan" - remove "Holy" per
WP:HONORIFIC and
WP:PBUH, or alternative add "Islamic" before "holy"
Leisure
"However, visitors are not recommended to swim in the waters there because of strong waves. Taman Shahbandar is also a popular recreation place in Kuala Terengganu. It is located by the Terengganu River estuary. Taman Shahbandar is located close to other famous attractions in Kuala Terengganu such as Pasar Payang, Bukit Puteri and Istana Maziah." Source? Also, what makes these attractions "famous"?
Edited according to suggestions. Sources are added to the paragraph and the section for Media.
Fikku fiq (
talk) 11:48, 12 August 2015 (UTC)reply
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