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Reviewer: Steelkamp ( talk · contribs) 05:46, 1 June 2022 (UTC)
Hello. I will be conducting a good article review of this article. I aim to get my part of the review done within the next few days.
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who signed Great Coasters International.Should this be
who signed a contract with Great Coasters International.? Steelkamp ( talk) 13:51, 11 June 2022 (UTC)
for a resort to rival Florida amusement parks– It's not clear to me what Florida amusement parks is? Is this a specific amusement park or in general. Would it make more sense to say
for a resort to rival other Florida amusement parks? Steelkamp ( talk) 13:51, 11 June 2022 (UTC)
Gwazi opened on June 18, 1999, as Florida's first dueling wooden roller coaster. In 1999, Florida was home to two dueling roller coasters: the Dueling Dragons inverted roller coaster (later known as Dragon Challenge), at Universal Studios' Islands of Adventure and Gwazi; the two roller coasters opened a month apart.This could be simplified to:
Gwazi opened on June 18, 1999, as Florida's first dueling wooden roller coaster. It opened one month ahead of another dueling wooden roller coaster: the Dueling Dragons at Universal Studios' Islands of Adventure.Steelkamp ( talk) 13:51, 11 June 2022 (UTC)
possible attractions were being conversed to replace it.Should this be
possible attractions were being considered to replace it.? Steelkamp ( talk) 14:59, 11 June 2022 (UTC)
Likewise, a park's spokesperson– Should this be
Likewise, a park spokesperson? Steelkamp ( talk) 14:59, 11 June 2022 (UTC)
The roller coaster was touted as being the steepest and fastest hybrid roller coaster, as well as the tallest hybrid roller coaster in North America.Should this be
The roller coaster was touted as being the steepest, fastest and tallest hybrid roller coaster in North America.Steelkamp ( talk) 14:59, 11 June 2022 (UTC)
Construction on the project site went vertical on August 10, 2019.This strikes me as unencyclopedic language. Seems like something that the news source wrote to get people reading. Should be reworded. Steelkamp ( talk) 14:59, 11 June 2022 (UTC)
The individual wooden tracks reached a length of 3,508 ft or 1,069 m or 7,000 feet (2,100 m) when combined.– Why not just say 7,016 feet, or even leave the combined amount out entirely? Steelkamp ( talk) 16:43, 11 June 2022 (UTC)
Gwazi was touted for having the first six fly-bys on a dueling roller coaster.This is confusing to be. Change to
Gwazi was touted for being the first dueling roller coast with six fly-bys.Steelkamp ( talk) 09:45, 12 June 2022 (UTC)
It soon approaches a banked right turn and takes a banked left turn.Could be reworded. Steelkamp ( talk) 09:45, 12 June 2022 (UTC)
...differentiate itself from the Orlando theme park market's use in newer ride technology and rising interest of older-style attractions.This appears to be slightly different from what the source says. The source seems to imply that it was a coincidence. In any case, this could be reworded as it was confusing for me to read. Steelkamp ( talk) 13:51, 11 June 2022 (UTC)
The idea for building a wooden roller coaster was selected as opposed to steel because of the growing preference in antiquated attractions. The park also used the selection to stand out from other Florida theme parks use in modern ride technology.Adog ( Talk・ Cont) 21:16, 11 June 2022 (UTC)
park officials hinted that there were future construction plans involving Gwazi slated for 2020.I'm not sure it's correct to say they "hinted" when it seems that they outright stated that there would be construction. Steelkamp ( talk) 16:43, 11 June 2022 (UTC)
In 2006, a 52-year-old Palm Springs, Florida, resident...I think that should be Palm Harbor, Florida. Steelkamp ( talk) 09:45, 12 June 2022 (UTC)
@ Steelkamp: I wanted to check-in and see how you are doing since it has been about a week. No rush! :) Adog ( Talk・ Cont) 03:36, 8 June 2022 (UTC)