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Reviewer: K. Peake ( talk · contribs) 10:03, 16 October 2020 (UTC) reply

Good Article review progress box Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

I hope this review goes well with you being on Wiki more now -- K. Peake 10:03, 16 October 2020 (UTC) reply

Infobox and lead

• WP:OVERLINK of Billie Eilish under songwriters
• Identify him as Finneas under producers
• "from her debut EP Don't Smile at Me (2017)." → "from her debut EP, Don't Smile at Me (2017)."
• Wikilink Finneas O'Connell
• "whilst the latter solely handled its production." → "while the latter solely handled production."
• "Musically, it was described as a" → "The song is a"
• "Lyrically, the track is" → "Lyrically, it is"
• "feels for a boy" → "feels for a male"
• "The track was accompanied by a music video released" → "An accompanying music video was released" with the wikilink
• Mention about the video's synopsis in the following sentence
• ""Hostage" was certified platinum in the United States and Canada." → "The song was certified platinum by the Recording Industry Assocation of America (RIAA) and Music Canada (MC) in the United States and Canada, respectively." with the wikilinks
• Mention something about live performance(s) in the last sentence

Background and composition

• "is the eighth and final track on Eilish's debut EP Don't Smile at Me," → "was included as the eighth and final track on Eilish's debut EP Don't Smile at Me,"
• "It was written by" → "The song was written by"
• "her brother Finneas O'Connell. Finneas was also" → "her brother Finneas O'Connell, known under his stage name of Finneas. He was also solely"
• Target mixing to Audio mixing (recorded music)
• Target mastering to Mastering (audio)
• "to sheet music website Musicnotes.com," → "to the sheet music published at Musicnotes.com,"
• "vocals range between" → "span a range from"
• ""Hostage" is a" → "Musically, "Hostage" was described as a"
• "a happy relationship." → "a happy relationship:"
• "I want to be alone, alone with you, does that make sense?" are the actual lyrics according to the source. I supposed the commas may be used to separate lines, but still, make sure the words are correct 100%
• "sense?" she harmonizes with her Finneas." → "sense?", she harmonizes with Finneas."
• "them for herself. "I wanna" → "them for herself: "I want to"
• "Eilish turns out..." where does the source say this?
• "She wants to keep him..." where does the source say this and there is no mention of the following lyrics?

Reception

• Retitle to Reception and promotion, placing the live performances at the bottom of this section instead of where they currently are
• "described it as" → "described the song as"
• "and says it" → "and said that it"
• "on dangerous." She further compared it" → "on dangerous". She further compared the song"
• ""and vulnerability" of " Idontwannabeyouanymore"." → "and the "vulnerability" of " Idontwannabeyouanymore", both of which are from Don't Smile at Me."
• "The staff remarked it as" → "The staff hailed the song as"
• "The song placed at" → "The song was placed at"
• Fix Insider typo and target to Insider (website) per MOS:LINK2SECT
• "with Claudia Willen describing it 'artfully" → "with Claudia Willen of the website noting that it "artfully"
• "And shows Eilish's" → "She continued, writing that the song shows Eilish's"
• "received a platinum certification in" → "has been certified platinum in"
• The live performances should be straight after this in the para

Music video

Background and release

• Retitle to Background
• Wikilink music video
• "released exclusively for" → "released exclusively via"
• "It was later uploaded to" → "The video was later uploaded to"
• "to create a white room" → "to create a room"
• "Eilish explained it a statement" → "Eilish explained in a statement"
• "the visual.[13] They had trouble" → "the visual, as a result of issues with schedules and trouble" since the source you obviously intended to place here does mention the other part which is notable fully
• "They'd eventually figure out a plan where Stromae and Luc's would come up with the idea and Scholfield" → "They eventually figured out a plan that involved Stromae and Tam coming up with the idea, while Scholfield"
• "They had to" → "The group had to"
• "Eilish's tour. They rehearsed the choreography" → "Eilish's tour, with them rehearsing the choreography"
• "they would shoot the video" → "the group shot the music video"
• "Eilish concludes, saying:" → "Eilish concluded by saying,"

Synopsis

• Retitle to Synopsis and reception, since the following sub-section is so short that it can be a para directly below this one
• "The setting of the video takes place in an all-white room," → "The music video is set in an all white room,"
• [4] should be solely at the end of the para since it is the sole ref here
• "her lover dressed in all white." → "her lover, who are both dressed in all white."
• "as he is getting pulled up." → "beneath the fabric while he is getting pulled up."
• "He stops moving..." this sentence is not backed up

Reception

• Target Complex to Complex (magazine) per MOS:LINK2SECT
• "the choreography, saying" → "the choreography of the video, saying that"
• "says the video" → "wrote that the video"
• "while Eilish and her" → "while he stated that Eilish and her"
• ""Hostage" received a" → "The music video received a"
• Target Best Cinematography to MTV Video Music Award for Best Cinematography

Live performances

• "performed live during Eilish's" → "performed "Hostage" live during her"
• "the setlist of her" → "the setlist of Eilish's"

Credits and personnel

• Good

Charts

Year-end charts

• See MOS:TABLECAPTION

Certifications

• See MOS:TABLECAPTION

References

• Copyvio score looks decent at 38.7%
• Make sure all of these are archived by using the tool
• Target Insider to Insider (website) on ref 6 per MOS:LINK2SECT
• Target Complex to Complex (magazine) on ref 12 per MOS:LINK2SECT
• Ref 13 is an incorrectly formatted duplicate of ref 15; replace all places where 13 is invoked with 15
• MOS:QWQ issues with ref 15 and cite Universal Music Group as the publisher
• [Universal Music Group → Universal Music Group on ref 17

Final comments and verdict

•  On hold after a quick review, this article is decent currently -- K. Peake 12:58, 16 October 2020 (UTC) reply

Kyle Peake, thanks a lot for the review! Lmk if anything else needs to be done! The Ultimate Boss ( talk) 05:55, 17 October 2020 (UTC) reply

The Ultimate Boss ✓ Pass now because nothing else needs to be done after some brief copy editing from me! -- K. Peake 09:34, 17 October 2020 (UTC) reply