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Reviewer: Lee Vilenski ( talk · contribs) 12:22, 11 September 2020 (UTC) reply

Hello, I am planning on reviewing this article for GA Status, over the next couple of days. Thank you for nominating the article for GA status. I hope I will learn some new information, and that my feedback is helpful.

If nominators or editors could refrain from updating the particular section that I am updating until it is complete, I would appreciate it to remove a edit conflict. Please address concerns in the section that has been completed above (If I've raised concerns up to references, feel free to comment on things like the lede.)

I generally provide an overview of things I read through the article on a first glance. Then do a thorough sweep of the article after the feedback is addressed. After this, I will present the pass/failure. I may use strikethrough tags when concerns are met. Even if something is obvious why my concern is met, please leave a message as courtesy.

Best of luck! you can also use the {{done}} tag to state when something is addressed. Lee Vilenski ^{( talk • contribs)}

Please let me know after the review is done, if you were happy with the review! Obviously this is regarding the article's quality, however, I want to be happy and civil to all, so let me know if I have done a good job, regardless of the article's outcome.

Immediate Failures

• It is a long way from meeting any one of the six good article criteria -
• It contains copyright infringements -
• It has, or needs, cleanup banners that are unquestionably still valid. These include{{cleanup}}, {{POV}}, {{unreferenced}} or large numbers of {{citation needed}}, {{clarify}}, or similar tags. (See also {{QF-tags}}). -
• It is not stable due to edit warring on the page. -

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Prose

Lede

• Chiwa Saito is missing an accent Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{( talk • contribs)} 15:21, 18 September 2020 (UTC) reply
  • You mean her Japanese romanization? – Like this "Chiwa Saitō"? NotEnglishSpeaker ( talk) 13:06, 25 September 2020 (UTC) reply
    • I do - or at least her article has the diacritic on the o as well. We should be consistent with names in this way. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{( talk • contribs)} 20:16, 25 September 2020 (UTC) reply
      •  Done NotEnglishSpeaker ( talk) 14:08, 26 September 2020 (UTC) reply
• Madoka from making contract with the messenger of magic - something is wrong here "Madoka from making a contract with the messenger of magic" or Madoka from making contact with the messenger of magic"? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{( talk • contribs)} 15:21, 18 September 2020 (UTC) reply
  • Fixed. NotEnglishSpeaker ( talk) 13:06, 25 September 2020 (UTC) reply
• Do we need to link surreal? Seems like a common enough word. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{( talk • contribs)} 15:21, 18 September 2020 (UTC) reply
  • Removed link. NotEnglishSpeaker ( talk) 13:06, 25 September 2020 (UTC) reply
• I feel the first para on the conception and such is probably the more notable stuff than her canon. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{( talk • contribs)} 15:21, 18 September 2020 (UTC) reply
  • What do you mean? Could you elaborate more? NotEnglishSpeaker ( talk) 13:06, 25 September 2020 (UTC) reply
• Chiwa Saito voices her in the Japanese version of the series, while Cristina Vee voices her in the English version. - repeat "voices her", but there should be a better way to say this. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{( talk • contribs)} 15:21, 18 September 2020 (UTC) reply
  • Revised. NotEnglishSpeaker ( talk) 13:06, 25 September 2020 (UTC) reply
• remains popular among fans - do we really care about this? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{( talk • contribs)} 15:21, 18 September 2020 (UTC) reply
  • Well, she still tops anime character polls in Japan so I thought it's worth mentioning. If you feel it's unnecessary then I will remove it! NotEnglishSpeaker ( talk) 13:06, 25 September 2020 (UTC) reply
    • Might be worth saying exactly that - rather than the more general overview. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{( talk • contribs)} 20:17, 25 September 2020 (UTC) reply
      • Removed as I feel it's unnecessary. NotEnglishSpeaker ( talk) 14:08, 26 September 2020 (UTC) reply
• For voicing Homura, Saito won the 2011 Newtype Anime Award for Best Supporting Actress. - move to the section on voice acting. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{( talk • contribs)} 15:21, 18 September 2020 (UTC) reply
  • Removed sentence. It's already in the "Critical response" section. NotEnglishSpeaker ( talk) 13:06, 25 September 2020 (UTC) reply

General

• Accent for Saito in the caption also needs an accent. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{( talk • contribs)} 15:27, 18 September 2020 (UTC) reply
• The article in general has some issues with linking quite common terms - heart disease, experiment, masterpiece et al. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{( talk • contribs)} 15:27, 18 September 2020 (UTC) reply
  • Removed links. NotEnglishSpeaker ( talk) 13:06, 25 September 2020 (UTC) reply
• In The Rebellion Story is uncited. If this were plot, it isn't so bad, but at least a citation for the translations. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{( talk • contribs)} 15:27, 18 September 2020 (UTC) reply
  •  Done. NotEnglishSpeaker ( talk) 13:06, 25 September 2020 (UTC) reply
• PlayStation Portable action video game WP:SEAOFBLUE/ Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{( talk • contribs)} 15:27, 18 September 2020 (UTC) reply
  •  Done. NotEnglishSpeaker ( talk) 13:06, 25 September 2020 (UTC) reply
• Critical response has a major issue with WP:CITEKILL. 3 is the maximum amount of citations in a row - either kill the ones not needed, or try WP:BUNDLING. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{( talk • contribs)} 15:27, 18 September 2020 (UTC) reply
  •  Done. NotEnglishSpeaker ( talk) 13:06, 25 September 2020 (UTC) reply
• "Analysis" seems pretty WP:CRUFTY in my eyes - specifically the quotes. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{( talk • contribs)} 15:27, 18 September 2020 (UTC) reply
  • So what do you suggest? Should I rewrite the section or just trim? NotEnglishSpeaker ( talk) 13:06, 25 September 2020 (UTC) reply
    • Trim the quotes - I'm a bit of a stickler for only adding quotes that actually make (or agree to) points in the article. There's a lot of quite long quotes that could be trimmed a bit. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{( talk • contribs)} 20:19, 25 September 2020 (UTC) reply
      • I trimmed some of the quotes. NotEnglishSpeaker ( talk) 14:08, 26 September 2020 (UTC) reply
• Merchandising could do with an image - but seems like mostly a list of things that they have merchandise of. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{( talk • contribs)} 15:27, 18 September 2020 (UTC) reply
  • Thanks for the review! I will go through it and address the points you have noted in the next few days. NotEnglishSpeaker ( talk) 17:49, 19 September 2020 (UTC) reply
    • No worries. It's a nice article. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{( talk • contribs)} 18:23, 19 September 2020 (UTC) reply

GA Review

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b ( MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a ( reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c ( OR): d ( copyvio and plagiarism):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a ( major aspects): b ( focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b ( appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Review meta comments

• I'll begin the review as soon as I can! If you fancy returning the favour, I have a list of nominations for review at WP:GAN and WP:FAC, respectively. I'd be very grateful if you were to complete one of these if you get time. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{( talk • contribs)} Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{( talk • contribs)} 12:22, 11 September 2020 (UTC) reply
  • Any updates on this NotEnglishSpeaker? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{( talk • contribs)} 16:39, 24 September 2020 (UTC) reply
    • I'm very sorry for getting late to it, I've been really busy lately...Anyways, great review! Looking forward to your responses! NotEnglishSpeaker ( talk) 13:06, 25 September 2020 (UTC) reply