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Reviewer: Zad68 ( talk · contribs) 15:33, 9 January 2013 (UTC) reply

Status = NOT LISTED AS GA

Starting review... right off the top, looks pretty decent. ihyuan, are you still around to respond to questions/issues?? Zad 68 17:21, 9 January 2013 (UTC) reply

Finished first read-through, notes below, still have to go through sources. There are some grammar and clarity items to address. Zad 68 19:50, 9 January 2013 (UTC) reply

ihyuan, are you around to fix the issues identified? If not, this won't be able to pass GA... Zad 68 22:33, 10 January 2013 (UTC) reply

Zad68, ihyuan was part of a class at Washington University; a couple of dozen bird articles were submitted to GAN as a result, including this one. The university has been on break since before Christmas; according to the university web site, classes begin again on Monday, January 14, so I wouldn't expect to be getting any reply before then. Even then, there's no guarantee that members of the class will be returning to Wikipedia now that their fall class assignment (and Wikipedia editing requirement) is over. At this point, you should probably keep this on hold for the usual week, and if ihyuan hasn't checked in by then—or maybe by the end of the following weekend, if you're feeling generous—you may have to close the review at that point. BlueMoonset ( talk) 23:35, 10 January 2013 (UTC) reply
Thanks for this info! I never would have known. I'll do as you suggest. Zad 68 15:17, 11 January 2013 (UTC) reply
Hi, Zad68. Thanks so much for your review comments. I was in this class last semester with ihyuan, and was main contributor to it from the class. Ihyuan nominated it, and while I'm unsure if she'll be able to work on the article, I would love to take on the review if at all possible. Please let me know if that is alright. While I am a little backed up right now, I will try and get through the items listed below as I can. Thank you so much for your patience, I'm looking forward to improving the page further! Nsavalia23 ( talk) 19:02, 15 January 2013 (UTC) reply
Great to hear! Yes, let's get this done. I stopped working on the review thinking nobody was around to address the issues, but if you'd like to carry it forward, fine with me, and I'll finish the review. It's my only review going so that's fine. Zad 68 19:05, 15 January 2013 (UTC) reply

OK I spent a little more time tonight looking at the article and right now I am leaning toward not passing it at this time. The biggest issue I ran into tonight is the use of Neyman 1978, which is a primary study, and it appears the interpretation of this primary source is being done by the Wikipedia article author, which is a pretty serious problem per WP:NOR. Also the paper studied one group of tamarins and Neyman's observations of this group are being use to support fairly central general statements in the article about tamarins, and this is also a WP:NOR problem--the source cited doesn't support the article content. There are some other sourcing problems as well, including using Wikipedia as a source (not allowed) and what looks like an anonymous self-published source. So, I'm getting the suspicion that a good understanding of WP sourcing guidelines was not used during article development. I'd like to hear back before making a final decision but these seem like non-trivial problems that would require a bigger time window to fix than is normally seen in a GA review. Zad 68 05:09, 21 January 2013 (UTC) reply

Since there hasn't been any activity on the article for over a week, and since you've made the effort to review the article, I will make the changes and fixes you've suggested today. I'll have a look into the OR and referencing issues after that. Cheers, Jack ( talk) 12:34, 21 January 2013 (UTC) reply
OK Jack. If Nsavalia23 has an objection to you stepping in and taking it over, I guess we'll have to discuss that, but assuming there is no objection from Nsavalia23, I'm OK with it. I was still having reservations about trying to keep this particular GA run going, but in light of your other work in related areas, and especially that gold star near the top of primate, I'm OK with giving it a go! But please if you think this article needs too much work for the normal GA timeframe (usually about a week) let me know and we'll close this GA, looking for a resubmit later. I'd rather you take the time to do a proper job and resubmit a little later instead of feeling time pressure to squeeze all the work needed in to bring it to GA. Zad 68 18:27, 21 January 2013 (UTC) reply
Yeah you're right, I don't think it's ready in its current state. I just want to make sure all your effort doesn't go to waste, comments like yours are always really helpful! Especially when you've done all the hard work and someone just has to make the changes. Cheers, Jack ( talk) 19:12, 21 January 2013 (UTC) reply
No objection here! Thank you Jack for picking up my slack. With my inexperience in Wiki-writing and with the WP:NOR issues, I really appreciate Zad68's comments and think both of your help will get this article to a much better level. I will chime in to move the article along if you don't mind, but please do feel free to lead the way! Nsavalia23 ( talk) 22:40, 21 January 2013 (UTC) reply

Thanks folks... as discussed above, this article does not meet GA standards at this time and isn't reasonably expected to be able to be made to meet the standards in the normal GA timeframe. Zad 68 02:51, 22 January 2013 (UTC) reply

Picked up again as Jack has been willing to address issues, continuing review. Zad 68 04:06, 7 March 2013 (UTC) reply

Impressions after first read-through: what a tremendous improvement. Not a lot to pick on with the prose, so it'll be investigating the sourcing and making sure the article content is reflecting the sources accurately. Zad 68 04:27, 7 March 2013 (UTC) reply

Jack I will be providing more notes but need a few days, appreciate your patience. Zad 68

Jack it was pointed out to me that it wasn't proper form to try to continue a failed GA, so we're moving it over to the GA2 page. See you over here... Zad 68 03:55, 10 March 2013 (UTC) reply

GA table

Rate Attribute Review Comment
1. Well-written:
1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct. short paragraph, overuse & misuse of 'however', some long sentences need to be broken up/simplified, a few grammar and clarity items to resolve
1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation. issues with WP:WTW "claim", "finally"
2. Verifiable with no original research:
2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.
2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose). ref to German Wikipedia, animalinfo.org does not appear to be WP:RS, cannot confirm "15 individuals" from source cited, fozblog.com is borderline
2c. it contains no original research. WP:PRIMARY Neyman paper used, there are concerns that the author of the Wikipedia article is the one doing the interpretation of Neyman
3. Broad in its coverage:
3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.
3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style). This article's large section on lanaguage development is in line with the emphasis I see from a quick Google Scholar search
4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.
5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content.
6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions. Really nice image selection! A few of the captions could be more expressive.
7. Overall assessment. Does not meet GA standard at this time

Notes

MOS compliance

  • Wikilinks to DAB pages that need to be resolved to article pages: gular, mutualism
  • Suggested technical terms to wikilink/explain/replace with more common terms: multivariate
    • Done, but there are probably a few more that I'll catch in subsequent read-throughs. Jack ( talk) 11:05, 4 March 2013 (UTC) reply

General

  • "However" is overused and often used inappropriately, inhibiting clarity. It is often being used in places where "additionally" is actually meant. In many cases, the use of the word simply can be eliminated. Go through the article and review each use of the word, and remove the word in each case where it is not being used to contrast two opposing ideas.

Lead

  • Green tickY

Etymology

  • In German-speaking areas, the cotton-top tamarin is commonly known as "Lisztaffe" (literally "Liszt monkey") most likely due to the resemblance of its hairstyle with that of Hungarian composer and piano virtuoso Franz Liszt. -- this is sourced to German Wikipedia, Wikis are never WP:RS, either remove the sentence (it's not critical) or cite the underlying sources
    • Removed sentence as I couldn't find a decent source for this. Jack ( talk) 11:06, 4 March 2013 (UTC) reply

Taxonomy and phylogeny

  • Consider combining first sentence referencing Linnaeus with the following paragraph to avoid having a single-sentence paragraph
  • "Philip Hershkovitz performed a taxonomic analysis of the species in 1977, classifying the Panamanian tamarin Saguinus geoffroyi as a subspecies of Saguinus oedipus, which lives exclusively in Colombia, based on fur coloration patterns, cranial and mandibular morphology, and ear size.[7] " -- can this long sentence be broken up to make the content more clear?
  • "finally" -- remove as time-relative word, what if someone else does an analysis next year?

Physical characteristics

  • "foreword" -- probably "foreward" is meant

Behavior

  • The cotton-top tamarin is a highly social primate that typically lives in groups of 15 individuals. 15 exactly, or is there a range? I checked this against the cited source document and can't confirm 15, what page is it on?
    • Changed, now uses multiple sources. Jack ( talk) 13:00, 4 March 2013 (UTC) reply
  • why is "Cooperative Breeding Hypothesis" and wikilinked? Is this a trademarked discipline-standard term? Can it be wikilinked to cooperative breeding?
  • "Taken together, researchers believe..." -- 'Taken together' is modifying 'researchers' here instead of the behaviors, consider "Based on this, researchers..."
  • They concluded that S. oedipus uses a simple grammar consisting of eight phonetic variations of short, frequency-modulated “chirps” that each represents varying messages and five longer constant frequency “whistles.” -- grammar issues here, consider: "They concluded that S. oedipus uses a simple grammar consisting of eight phonetic variations of short, frequency-modulated “chirps”–each representing varying messages–and five longer, constant-frequency “whistles.”
  • They claim that some of these calls demonstrate -- "claim" is a WP:WTW indicating doutfulness, consider "theorize" or "hypothesize"
  • However, infants will also reduce their prototype chirping in the presence of predators. While it is unclear whether infants are shadowing the calling behavior of adults or they are comprehending danger remains unclear. However researchers argue that these cotton-top toddlers are able to represent semantic information regardless of immature speech production -- is "However" needed here, both times?
  • "an aforementioned" -- not needed
  • "When an adult produces an aforementioned C-call chirp," -- the C-call has not been discussed by this point
    • Removed aforementioned. Jack ( talk) 13:00, 4 March 2013 (UTC) reply
  • The whole "<letter>-call" concept needs to be described before it starts getting used in the discussions about language acquisition and usage
    • Add sentence in communication section. Jack ( talk) 13:00, 4 March 2013 (UTC) reply
  • Neyman's paper is primary study data, it's being cited to support general statements like "The cotton-top tamarin is a highly social primate that typically lives in groups of 15 individuals." This is troubling in two ways, 1) It appears the author of the Wikipedia article is the one doing the interpretation of the primary source, and this is not allowed per WP:NOR, and 2) This one specific study is being used inappropriately to make general statements about the tamarins.
    • Add secondary sources to general statements. Jack ( talk) 13:00, 4 March 2013 (UTC) reply

Conservation status

  • Habitat destruction through forest clearing is the main cause of this collapse, and cotton-tops have lost more than three-quarters of their original habitat to deforestation. -- cited to "fozblog" which appears to be a borderline source, can you find a stronger source?

Media

  • Green tickY

References

  • Green tickY section exists and uses WP:MOS-compliant style

Sourcing

  • German Wikipedia is not a WP:RS, Wikis are never WP:RS, remove sentence or cite underlying source
  • animalinfo.org appears to be an anonymous WP:SPS, what indicates it's relaible?
Sources table

In this table:

  • Source lists the source as cited in the article
  • Seems WP:RS? means, "Does this source appear to meet WP:RS for reliable sourcing?"
  • Use OK? means, is the source used appropriately in the article? For the review, a few selected sources will be spot-checked to ensure they aren't plagiarized and support the article content. ? indicates the source was not spot-checked.
  • Notes will summarize problems found and what needs to be done to fix them
Source Seems WP:RS? Use OK? Notes
<ref name=msw3>{{MSW3 Groves|pages=135|id=12100251}}</ref> Yes ?
<ref name=SAP>{{cite book | author = Rylands AB and Mittermeier RA | title = South American Primates: Comparative Perspectives in the Study of Bahavior, Ecology, and Conservation | chapter = The Diversity of the New World Primates (Platyrrhini) | publisher = Springer | editor = Garber PA, Estrada A, Bicca-Marques JC, Heymann EW, Strier KB | isbn = 978-0-387-78704-6 | pages=23–54 |year = 2009}}</ref> Yes ?
<ref name=IUCN >{{IUCN | id = 19823| taxon = Saguinus oedipus| assessors = Savage, A. & Causado, J. | assessment_year = 2008| version = 2011.2| accessdate = 18 June 2012}}</ref> Yes ?
<ref>{{cite book|last=Linnaeus|first=Carl|title=Systema naturæ. Regnum animale.|year=1758|page=28|url=http://www.biodiversitylibrary.org/item/80764#page/38/mode/1up|edition=10|accessdate=19 November 2012}}</ref> Yes ?
<ref>{{cite web|title=Primate Factsheets: Cotton-top tamarin (Saguinus oedipus) Taxonomy, Morphology, & Ecology|url=http://pin.primate.wisc.edu/factsheets/entry/cotton-top_tamarin|work=Primate Info Net|publisher=Wisconsin Primate Research Center (WPRC) Library|accessdate=19 November 2012|author=Cawthon Lang KA|date=18 May 2005|quote=Other names: cotton-headed tamarin or white-plumed bare-face tamarin; paryk-pinché (Danish); gewone pincheaap (Dutch); valkotöyhtötamariini (Finnish); tamarin d'Oedipe, tamarin à perruque, or tamarin pinché (French); lisztäffchen (German); bichichi, mono tití cabeciblanco, tití, titis, tití blanco, tití leoncito, or tití pielroja (Spanish); bomullshuvudtamarin or pinché (Swedish)}}</ref> Yes ?
<ref name=IUCN> The [[IUCN Red List]] of Threatened Species. http://www.iucnredlist.org/details/19823/0</ref> Yes but dup ? This is a dup ref that should be combined
<ref>[[:de:Lisztaffe|German Wikipedia article]]</ref> No ? Wikis are never WP:RS, cite the underlying sources German Wikipedia uses instead
<ref name=" Estrada2006">{{cite book |last= Estrada |first=A |title= New perspectives in the study of Mesoamerican primates: distribution, ecology, behavior, and conservation |year=2006}}</ref> Yes ?
<ref name="Defler2003">{{cite book |last=Defler |first=T |authorlink =Thomas Defler |title= Primates of Colombia |edition=2nd |year=2003 |editor= José Vicente Rodríguez Mahecha}}</ref> Yes ?
<ref name=" Hershkovitz. 1977">{{cite book |last= Hershkovitz |first=P |title= Living New World monkeys (Platyrrhini): with an introduction to Primates |year=1977}}</ref> Yes ?
<ref>{{cite web |url= http://www.animalinfo.org/species/primate/saguoedi.htm | title= Animal Info - Endangered Animals |date= September 10, 2006 |accessdate=19 June 2012}}</ref> No — appears to be anonymous WP:SPS ? What indicates this source is reliable?
<ref name="Oakland Zoo - Cotton Topped Tamarin" >{{cite web |url= http://www.oaklandzoo.org/Cotton_Topped_Tamarin.php | title= Oakland zoo: Cotton Topped Tamarin |accessdate=20 June 2012}}</ref> Yes ?
<ref name="EisenbergRedford. 1999">{{cite book |last1= Eisenberg |first1= John F |last2= Redford |first2= Kent H |title= Mammals of the Neotropics: The central neotropics: Ecuador, Peru, Bolivia, Brazil |year=1999| publisher= University of Chicago Press}}</ref> Yes ?
<ref name="AC12">Sproul et al. Cottontop tamarin,'' Saguinus oedipus'', alarm calls contain sufficient information for recognition of individual identity. [[Animal Behaviour]] (2006) vol. 72 (6) pp. 1379-1385</ref> ?
<ref name="CB3">Cronin et al. Prosocial behaviour emerges independent of reciprocity in cotton-top tamarins. [[Proceedings of the Royal Society B: Biological Sciences]] (2010) vol. 277 (1701) pp. 3845-3851</ref> ?
<ref name="CB2">Cleveland and Snowdon. Social development during the first twenty weeks in the cotton-top tamarin ('' Saguinus o. oedipus''). [[Animal Behaviour]] (1984) vol. 32 (2) pp. 432-444</ref> ?
<ref name="CB2">Cleveland and Snowdon. Social development during the first twenty weeks in the cotton-top tamarin (''Saguinus o. oedipus''). [[Animal Behaviour]] (1984) vol. 32 (2) pp. 432-444</ref> ?
<ref name="CB13">Tardif and Bales. Is infant-carrying a courtship strategy in [[callitrichid]] primates?. [[Animal Behaviour]] (1997) vol. 53 (5) pp. 1001-1007</ref> ?
<ref name="CB13">Tardif and Bales. Is infant-carrying a courtship strategy in callitrichid primates?. [[Animal Behaviour]] (1997) vol. 53 (5) pp. 1001-1007</ref> ?
<ref name="CB11">Sánchez et al. Costs of infant-carrying in the cotton-top tamarin (Saguinus oedipus). [[American Journal of Primatology]] (1999) vol. 48 (2) pp. 99-111</ref> ?
<ref name="CB1">Achenbach and Snowdon. Costs of Caregiving: Weight Loss in Captive Adult Male Cotton-Top Tamarins (Saguinus oedipus) Following the Birth of Infants. [[International Journal of Primatology]] (2002) vol. 23 (1) pp. 179-189</ref> ?
<ref name="CB11">Sánchez et al. Costs of infant carrying in the [[cotton-top tamarin]] (Saguinus oedipus). [[American Journal of Primatology]] (1999) vol. 48 (2) pp. 99-111</ref> ?
<ref name="CB14">Washabaugh et al. Variations in care for cottontop tamarin,'' Saguinus oedipus'', infants as a function of parental experience and group size. [[Animal Behaviour]] (2002) vol. 63 (6) pp. 1163-1174</ref> ?
<ref name="CB3">Cronin et al. [[Prosocial behavior]] emerges independent of reciprocity in cottontop tamarins. [[Proceedings of the Royal Society]]. Series B: Biological Sciences (2010) vol. 277 (1701) pp. 3845-3851</ref> ?
<ref name="Altr8">Hauser et al. Give unto others: genetically unrelated cotton-top tamarin monkeys preferentially give food to those who altruistically give food back. [[Proceedings of the Royal Society of London]]. Series B: Biological Sciences (2003) vol. 270 (1531) pp. 2363-2370</ref> ?
<ref name="Altr9">Hauser et al. Evolving the ingredients for reciprocity and spite. Philosophical Transactions of the Royal Society B: Biological Sciences (2009) vol. 364 (1533) pp. 3255-3266</ref> ?
<ref name="Altr9">Hauser et al. Evolving the ingredients for reciprocity and spite. [[Philosophical Transactions of the Royal Society B: Biological Sciences]] (2009) vol. 364 (1533) pp. 3255-3266</ref> ?
<ref name="Pun19">Clutton-Brock, T. H. & Parker, G. A. 1995 Punishment in animal societies. [[Nature]] 373, 209 – 216. (doi:10.1038/ 373209a0)</ref> ?
<ref name="Pun20">Hammerstein, P. 2003 Why is reciprocity so rare in social animals? A protestant appeal. In The genetic and cultural evolution of cooperation (ed. P. Hammerstein), pp. 83 – 93. Cambridge, MA: [[MIT Press]].</ref> ?
<ref name="Altr21">Byrne, R. W. 1994 The evolution of intelligence. In Behavior and evolution (eds P. J. B. Slater & T. R. Halliday), pp. 223–265. Cambridge, UK: [[Cambridge University Press]].</ref> ?
<ref name="Agg10">Kleiman. Parent-offspring conflict and sibling competition in a monogamous primate. American Naturalist (1979) pp. 753-760</ref> ?
<ref name="Gen22">Neyman, P. F. 1978. Aspects of the ecology and social organization of free-ranging cotton-top tamarins (Saguinus oedipus) and the conservation status of the species. In: [[The Biology and Conservation of the Callitrichidae]] (Ed. by D. G. Kleiman), pp. 39e71. Washington, D.C.: [[Smithsonian Institution Press]].</ref> Yes Can't find "15 individuals", WP:PRIMARY Where does it say "15 individuals" in the source? And, concerned that the article author is doing the interpretation of primary source
<ref name="Agg5">French and Snowdon. [[Sexual dimorphism]] in responses to unfamiliar intruders in the tamarin, '' Saguinus oedipus''. [[Animal Behaviour]] (1981) vol. 29 (3) pp. 822-829</ref> ?
<ref name="C&S1982">Cleveland and Snowdon. The Complex Vocal Repertoire of the Adult Cotton-top Tamarin (Saguinus oedipus oedipus). Zeitschrift für Tierpsychologie, now [[Ethology]] (1982) vol. 58 (3) pp. 231-270.</ref> ?
<ref name="LangAcq">Castro, Nicole A., and Charles T. Snowdon. "Development of vocal responses in infant cotton-top tamarins." [[Behaviour]] (2000): 629-646.</ref >Infants can at times produce adult-like chirps, but this is rarely done in the correct context and remains inconsistent across the first twenty weeks of life. Regardless, infant cotton-tops are able to respond in behaviorally appropriate ways to varying contexts when presented with adult chirps. This indicates that verbal perception is a quickly acquired skill for ''S. oedipus'' offspring, followed closely by auditory comprehension, and later by proper vocal producibility. ?
<ref name="CLC1">Weiss, D., Garibaldi, B. & Hauser, M. D. 2001. The production and perception of long calls by cotton-top tamarins (Saguinus oedipus): acoustic analyses and playback experiments. [[Journal of Comparative Psychology]], 115, 258e271.</ref> ?
<ref name="AC12">[[Sproul et al.]] Cottontop tamarin,'' Saguinus oedipus'', alarm calls contain sufficient information for recognition of individual identity. [[Animal Behaviour]] (2006) vol. 72 (6) pp. 1379-1385</ref> ?
<ref name="CLC2">Weiss, D. & Hauser, M. 2002. Perception of harmonics in the combination long call of cotton-top tamarins, Saguinus oedipus. Animal Behaviour, 64, 415e426.</ref> ?
<ref name= "CLC3">Miller, C. T. & Ghazanfar, A. A. 2002. Meaningful acoustic units in nonhuman primate vocal behavior. In: Cognitive Animal: Empirical and Theoretical Perspectives on Animal Cognition (Ed. by M. Bekoff, C. Allen & G. Burghardt), pp. 265e274. Cambridge, Massachusetts: MIT Press.</ref> ?
<ref name="FoodCall1">Elowson, A. Margaret, Pamela L. Tannenbaum, and Charles T. Snowdon. "Food-associated calls correlate with food preferences in cotton-top tamarins." [[Animal Behaviour]] 42.6 (1991): 931-937.</ref> ?
<ref name="FoodCall2">Roush, Rebecca S., and Charles T. Snowdon. "Food transfer and development of feeding behavior and food‐associated vocalizations in cotton‐top tamarins." [[Ethology]] 107.5 (2001): 415-429.</ref> ?
<ref name="2008-2010Top25">{{cite journal | editor1-last = Mittermeier | editor1-first = R.A. | editor2-last = Wallis | editor2-first = J. | editor3-last = Rylands | editor3-first = A.B. | editor4-last = Ganzhorn | editor4-first = J.U. | editor5-last = Oates | editor5-first = J.F. | editor6-last = Williamson | editor6-first = E.A. | editor7-last = Palacios | editor7-first = E. | editor8-last = Heymann | editor8-first = E.W. | editor9-last = Kierulff | editor9-first = M.C.M. | editor10-last = Long Yongcheng | editor11-last = Supriatna | editor11-first = J. | editor12-last = Roos | editor12-first = C. | editor13-last = Walker | editor13-first = S. | editor14-last = Cortés-Ortiz | editor14-first = L. | editor15-last = Schwitzer | editor15-first = C. | others = Illustrated by S.D. Nash | editor-link = Russell Mittermeier | year = 2009 | title = Primates in Peril: The World's 25 Most Endangered Primates 2008–2010 | publisher = IUCN/SSC Primate Specialist Group (PSG), International Primatological Society (IPS), and Conservation International (CI) | location = Arlington, VA. | pages = 1–92 | isbn = 978-1-934151-34-1 | url = http://www.primate-sg.org/PDF/Primates.in.Peril.2008-2010.pdf | format = PDF}}</ref> ?
<ref> [http://www.fozblog.com/fozblog/2007/09/endangered-spec.html Endangered Species Feature: Cotton-top Tamarin]</ref> ? — borderline source ? Can you find better?
<ref>{{cite web |url = http://wildlifeconservationnetwork.org/wildlife/cottontop2.html#conservationist |title = Cotton-top Tamarin Conservation |publisher = [[Wildlife Conservation Network]]}}</ref> ?

Post-GA suggestions

  • Some duplicate wikilinks: foraging, altruism, predation, alarm calls
  • But treat the wikilinks in the lead separately from the body. For example sagittal crest should be WL'd in the lead like it is in the body
  • Placement of footnotes should be made consistent. Sometimes they are inside the punctuation: and Coimbra-Filho in 1981[7], and, the Pinché tamarin[5], is; sometimes outside such as Thorington (1976),[7] posit, described by Linnaeus in 1758.[3]. I like refs after punctuation.
  • Make in-line reference styles consistent, sometimes they have ampersand (&), sometimes they have 'and' spelled out: Hernandez-Camacho & Cooper (1976), and later Mittermeier and Coimbra-Filho in 1981
  • Make use of quotes and apostrophes consistent... different styles are used
  • "pecking order" is casual and idiomatic, consider just "order" or "hierarchy"
  • "over and above" is redundant
  • "variously aged" unnecessary, consider removing
  • Behavior -- Is there an explanation how only the dominant pair ends up breeding? What prevenets the non-dominant members from breeding?
  • 'and ranks among the "The World's 25 Most Endangered Primates."'--consider explaining whose list this is and why it's notable to be on this list
  • A few sentences without obvious references: Cotton-tops also have forelimbs that are shorter than their hind limbs. Males of the species are only slightly larger than females. Like other members of the Callithrix family, the species has claws on most fingers and toes. However, only the big toe has flat nails that most other primates have., It is considered one of the few bare-faced tamarins because of the lack of facial hair. Its lower canine teeth are longer than its incisors, creating the appearance of tusks. ... but the referencing that is there meets the relatively low GA requirements
  • including curiosity, fear, dismay, playfulness, warnings, joy, and calls to young. -- unnecessary and inconsistent wikilinking in here
  • "CLC’s involve the" -- apostrophe not needed and make it look possessive
  • References -- some duplicates, like Neyman 1978, combine them
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