2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with
the layout style guideline.
Good formatting
2b.
reliable sources are
cited inline. All content that
could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).
Good. Subject is character, not actor, and as such must be illustrated by the character in question. Unlikely to be a free image available.
7. Overall assessment.
Pending
Comments
1a
Lede
He doesn't help Scully at all?
"The character serves as a replacement for his predecessor on the series,..." -- A little wordy. Why not "The character serves as a replacement for..."
Conceptual history
"Nogulich was replaced because the writing staff felt she was not able to create the "right chemistry" with her co-stars." -- This should probably be earlier. Lets not discuss Williams in detail and then return to Nogulich
Character arc
"... is attacked brutally by an MIB assassin." -- MIB in this context is? (for the general reader)
"X fatally shoots the Red Haired Man as he is about to step off the car. X boards the car with only enough time left to save either Mulder or the
alien-human hybrid the car was transporting, opting to save Mulder, and carries him off to safety just as the car explodes." -- Red Haired Man? Link? Also, repetition. Perhaps "X fatally shoots the Red Haired Man as he is about to step off the car, then boards the car with only enough time left to save either Mulder or the
alien-human hybrid the car was transporting. He opts to save Mulder, and carries him off to safety just as the car explodes."
I think I've got all of these. I've also added the principal cast in brackets after their characters, if you think this should be undone or expanded, let me know.
GRAPPLEX06:04, 18 March 2012 (UTC)reply
2a
Do we need the time for your video references for GA? I know they are required for FA.
I could supply them all if I sit and watch them again tomorrow (I'd probably format them as I did
here), but generally this doesn't come up at GA. I don't mind adding them though, but the video for ref 1 is less than five minutes long, so I'd be tempted just to add a time for ref 26; or would you prefer both for consistency?
GRAPPLEX06:04, 18 March 2012 (UTC)reply
2b
What makes starpulse an RS?
I had a look over at their content guidelines when you flagged it here, and although I couldn't find anything definitive on their editorial oversight, the poor English used on their "About us" pages leads me to think there isn't much of that. I've removed the information sourced to the site from the article.
GRAPPLEX06:04, 18 March 2012 (UTC)reply
If you do it, it should be consistent. I won't push for a GA, but if this ever winds up at FA I'd have to ask for the times.
Spotchecks
Current FN 22 (
this): Checks out for both bits of information cited
Current FN 9 (
here): Checks out, no close paraphrasing.
Current FN 29 (
here): Fails verification. It only says "The X-Files"
I've amended ref 29 to use
this page now (bloody Guild seems to change its layout a fair amount, I've also added a manual archiving of this one courtesy of WebCite. You'll need to click the "view cast list" link under The X-Files, it displays the list on-screen only when that's selected, which is an unfortunate amount of faff.
GRAPPLEX05:26, 18 March 2012 (UTC)reply
Thanks for taking the time to look at this one, I appreciate it. I've addressed most of what you've raised, and can provide time references for the videos tomorrow evening (it's 6 in the morning and I should probably sleep before rewatching any documentaries on spacemen).
GRAPPLEX06:04, 18 March 2012 (UTC)reply