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In the second last line under the Plot section, it should read 'presents' instead of 'present'. 49.206.13.93 ( talk) 16:36, 15 January 2019 (UTC)
Talk:Tumbbad
Regarding the music score part, I suggest making the music section more clear with the following changes.
'Kyd recorded with a Bulgarian choir for the track called Descending which was the first track he wrote for the film.'
'Both Prasad and Kyd interacted with each other through Skype.'
'The score involved live recordings of instruments such as cello, violin as well as the real sound of crickets.'
'Kyd created 3 different music styles for the 3 parts of the film.'
Officialjesperkyd ( talk) 01:05, 25 January 2019 (UTC)
It is given that the story is from 19th century but this is not true because the movie shows many motor vehicles from the first half of the 20th century. Please make the changes. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 122.182.210.94 ( talk) 12:11, 15 February 2019 (UTC)
PLEASE NOTE: This is not necessarily a review for this article's GA nomination so much as it is a couple of suggestions. Looking over the article, it seems very good. My ONLY suggestion is adding relevant images to the body of the article (namely the production and release sections). That way the reader has some sort of visual reference.-- Paleface Jack ( talk) 17:54, 2 August 2019 (UTC)
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Reviewer: Mujinga ( talk · contribs) 21:59, 12 September 2019 (UTC)
I will take this article on for review.
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I enjoyed reading through the article and there are no indications for an immediate fail, so I will work on the review, although I don't think I will get it all done tonight. Yashthepunisher I see there have been some possibly unhelpful recent edits so it would be worth checking them. For example, the latest one was vandalism and I reverted it.
I will come back to this last.
period horror filmmay be better as ' horror film and historical period drama'
Starring Shah in the lead role as Vinayak Rao, it follows the story of his search for a hidden treasure in 20th century Maharashtra.Shah should be Sohum Shah to avoid confusion. It would be good to have a couple more sentences on the film's story.
Pankaj Kumar served as the director of photography while Sanyukta Kaza was its editor. Jesper Kyd composed the original score while Ajay-Atul composed one song- this would be better at the end of the second paragraph
but the goddess saved him on the condition that he could never be worshipped and would be forgotten by history- this needs expanding a bit to explain how Hastar ends up in the goddess' womb
Vinayak's mother serves the local lord, Sarkar, in his mansion.- is this also happening in 1947? It's not clear to me [edit - ah yes a source says the action is in 1918]
Vinayak and his brother Sadashiv worry about having to feed the monstrous old woman who is their grandmother chained in a separate room.if i understand this right, this is not happening in Sarkar's mansion but in the house where Vinayak, Sadashiv and their mother live, so then I would suggest something like Meanwhile at their home, Vinayak and his brother Sadashiv worry about having to feed the monstrous old woman who is their grandmother chained up in a separate room
and the mother proposes leaving Tumbbad for Pune- this is the first time Tumbbad is mentioned, but I don't what it is... presumably a place, so i would suggest a first sentence which contextualises where the film takes place, ie Tumbbad, Maharashtra.
She ultimately explains that the well- what well? it hasn't been mentioned before
Sergeant Cooper pressures Raghav ... descending into Hastar's well- this is too much detail
Pandurang is told not to bring the dough doll down the well as it is just practice.- I'm confused by the phrase just practice, indeed maybe this sentence isn't needed at all
While his father is only concerned with escaping ... Pandurang climbs back to the surface.- too much detail here also
Rahi Anil Barve- it's worth adding he is the director again here (for people like me who have already forgotten!)
"which made him crap his pants"and
"utterly bland, mundane and forgettable".are direct quotes and should have the reference after them (currently number5). Also the fullstop should be before the quotes, this happened a few times in this section and should be corrected.
He realised,- no comma needed
Sohum Shah gained eight kilograms (eighteen pounds) for the role- Shah can be wikilinked again here. The lead should be summarising the body so there should be another sentence here stating Shah plays the main role of Vinayak.
after hearing the story- i would suggest to add for the first time after this
He found it similar to Baital Pachisi and Panchatantra- i watched https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=QFPEETv6phc but I didn't hear this
first half- source says first half hour
Gandhi and Miteshshould be Gandhi and Mitesh Shah
The film has minimal dialogue and was shot with constant physical movement with few cuts- second time this sentence is used, it's better here so the first one can be deleted
After the editing, Barve and Shah realised the film was "not able to achieve what it set out to do".- missing citation
He said- better Barve said
where no human had ventured for at least a 100 years- following MOS:SIC i would change 100 to hundred
After the editing, Barve and Shah realised the film was "not able to achieve what it set out to do".- no this isn't from ref3, now i see it's from ref16 - https://variety.com/2018/film/asia/dark-fantasy-tumbbad-opens-venice-critics-week-1202921510/
After the editing, Barve and Shah realised the film was "not able to achieve what it set out to do".is moved to directly in front of
It was then re-written and re-shot and the filming completed in May 2015
Shah wore the typical attire worn by Konkanasth Brahmans in Maharashtra.- need to specify Sohum Shah otherwise we might be talkign about the other Shah. As before, i think it's better to always identify each Shah fully. Also better to wikilink Kokanastha Brahmins
"consumed by earth"- since it's a direct quote maybe add the timestamp
Filmi Vastshould be Film i Väst
The film was produced by Filmi Vast and Filmgate Films along with Eros International and Aanand L. Rai's Colour Yellow Productions- source says Tumbbad is an Eros International and Aanand L Rai's presentation and a Little Town Films production in association with Colour a Yellow Productions. Co-produced by Filmi Väst and Filmgate Films so can you clarify that?
."and
".in the article. So I would suggest searching through and changing to one form. I tried and failed to see what is the Indian English standard. British English would be the form
."as per MOS:INOROUT
It was also screened at: the 2018 Fantastic Fest, Sitges Film Festival, the Screamfest Horror Film Festival, the El Gouna Film Festival, 23rd International Film Festival of Kerala, Morbido Film Fest, Brooklyn Horror Film Festival and Nitte International Film Festival.[33][34][35][36][37][38][39]- would be great if the festivals were referenced in sequence, right now it's a bit garbled.
Anand L. Raishould be Aanand L. Rai. And where was the screening? The source also doesn't say.
It was released on 12 October 2018 on 575 screensmaybe better to say Tumbbad was released in India on 12 October 2018 on 575 screens - also the source makes it seem that 575 is a low number, but to me it seems huge. What would be normal?
Padmaavat (2018)- doesn't need the (2018)
The atmosphere, landscape, and themes in 'Tumbbad' are accentuated by a sense of Gothic dread and an eerie expectancy of the diabolicalFollowing MOS:SIC I would change 'Tumbbad' to Tumbbad and the ref title from "'Tumbbad'review: the demons of the mind" to "'Tumbbad' review: the demons of the mind"
Gajjar Parth won the Best visual effects and the Best Film award at the Screamfest International Film Festival.this is a bit garbled, should be something like: Tumbbad won the Best Film award at the Screamfest International Film Festival and Gajjar Parth won for Best Visual Effects
Filmi Vastshould be Film i Väst, as above
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Include director's name above the producer's Mocking jo ( talk) 09:42, 16 May 2020 (UTC)
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Remove Creative Director and Co-director from infobox, they are officially not credited as Director. It is also technically incorrect. It's different work. 2409:4073:40A:BB09:108A:8916:CCD7:10D7 ( talk) 16:19, 2 November 2020 (UTC)