need to clarify the copyright status of the pic of the statue
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The statue pic. I'm not sure if it's PD, as we need to know the copyright status of the statue. When was it made? I suggest getting an opinion from an image expert.
Sometime ago I submitted a question on the legal issue of photographs made in Switzerland. The response was that photographs made in areas for the purpose of public viewing are not subject to copyright by the owner of the photographed subject. I will look up the diff. --
RelHistBuff (
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10:59, 16 February 2009 (UTC)reply
Lead. Does not summarize the article. Includes information not in the body. It's also pretty skimpy for an article of this size. I'd suggest a bit more information in the lead.
First paragraph of Baptism is very choppy and disjointed. The third sentence in particular seems disconnected from the preceding and following sentences.
I take it that "A Reply to Hubmaier" is written after the "Baptism, Rebaptism..." work? Might give some chronological indication of that.
The source gives the documents in the order of publication (as shown in the first paragraph) and both were published in 1525, but it isn't more specific than that. --
RelHistBuff (
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12:20, 18 February 2009 (UTC)reply
Context. You need a bit of it with some of the terms. Not everyone is going to know what Anabaptists are. A quick one phrase explanation of "Anabaptist, or those who did not practice infant baptism, in contrast to most other Christians." would proably suffice. You also have some odd choices of when to wikilink things. You don't link covenant until the third or fourth usage of it.
Eucharist section, third paragraph, suggest breaking off the second half of this paragraph into its own paragraph, starting with the sentence starting "The main issue for Zwingli..."
Sometimes you wikilink the titles of the books of the bible, sometimes you don't. Pick one and be consistent.
Did I miss any? There is a second reference to John 6:63 (the first is wikilinked) and there is Isaiah that is part of a title (which should not be wikilinked). --
RelHistBuff (
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12:30, 16 February 2009 (UTC)reply
Need to give some context to the "mercenary service" in the first paragraph of State
NOte any foreign languages in the references, notes, or further reading sections.
I added a de icon to the website. Should there be an indication for the Huldreich Zwinglis Samtliche Werke? The info is really from Stephens and he gave the German reference. I added the additional German reference for those who wanted to dig to the original source. --
RelHistBuff (
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12:30, 16 February 2009 (UTC)reply
If you don't actually use the SW stuff as a ref, throw it in a 'further reading' and it should probably note non-English (although I'm a lot less picky about that sort of thing in further reading/external links than I am in the main references)
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In fact, those are citations of a citation. You might notice that those cites are for quotes made by Zwingli, not something from Stephens' analysis. So what I did was to add the additional information of the original source (Zwingli's compiled works) which I think would be of interest to the reader. However, following
WP:CITE#SAYWHEREYOUGOTIT, Stephens is properly noted as the article's source of the quote. I added Zwingli's compiled works in the References section. --
RelHistBuff (
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15:07, 18 February 2009 (UTC)reply
That "Protestanitsm" template is plain ugly. Is there a real need for it?
Besides the points I've raised above, the prose is very wordy. I strongly suggest a good copyedit or two, by someone unconnected to the article. I wont hold up GA status waiting on that, but it will need a lot of polishing to go to FAC.
I've put the article on hold for seven days to allow folks to address the issues I've brought up. Feel free to contact me on my talk page, or here with any concerns, and let me know one of those places when the issues have been addressed. If I may suggest that you strike out, check mark, or otherwise mark the items I've detailed, that will make it possible for me to see what's been addressed, and you can keep track of what's been done and what still needs to be worked on.