Just a couple things that rub me the wrong way: two consecutive paragraphs in the History section begin with the "In [month] [year]," construction, and two consecutive sentences in the Style... section begin with "While...".
How are Encyclopaedia Metallum and last.fm reliable sources?
Reference #5 is a dead link.
There are inconsistencies in the accessdate formatting; I'd recommend using 'Month Day, Year' instead of ISO.
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
For a short article like this, I wouldn't be a good reviewer if I didn't verify that you've mined every available tidbit of information that's notable. Just tell me a little about how and where you searched. :)
Did you find your information through Google searches? Sites that you already knew? The
Internet Archive for links that were dead? Print sources from your local library's (online) collection? —
Zeagler (
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00:13, 4 December 2008 (UTC)reply
Mainly sites that I knew, e.g. the official site;
allmusic, etc.; everything is listed in the references section.
In looking through those sites, it seems you've condensed the information more than necessary. You could probably double the length of the article just from the Cronise interview. Also, I found numerous articles on the band through a
Factiva search. If you don't have access, send me an email and I'll hook you up with the articles. —
Zeagler (
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13:18, 4 December 2008 (UTC)reply
A little more depth is required for a good article (when the info is out there), but it'll take some time to work up to that, so I'm going to fail the article for now. When you renominate, send me a message and I'll expedite the process. —
Zeagler (
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13:18, 4 December 2008 (UTC)reply