A short, but comprehensive and mostly well-written article about a very bad game (IMO). Here's what needs to be fixed:
Lead and infobox
made for the PlayStation video game console. – Remove “video game”, as you’ve already mentioned that it’s a video game, so it’s assumed it’s for a video game console.
It was released in North America on April 12, 2001, and in the PAL region on March 22, 2001. - The release date for PAL should come first as it's before the NA release date.
sixteen – should be spelled out in numbers
richly detailed – reads like POV to me. I’d remove it.
This sentence sound weird to me: Video game critics gave the game a mixed reaction, and it receiving an aggregated score of 32% on Metacritic.” I’d change it to something like: Critics had mixed opinions about the game; it received an aggregated score of 32% on Metacritic.
Pin (wrestling) redirects to Pin (amateur wrestling)
Since the game was only released for the PlayStation, shouldn’t the image of the PS box art seen
here be used? I know that when games are released for several consoles, clean artwork is preferred, but in this case it’s only one platform. I don’t know what the agreement is on this, so it’s your call.
The game can be played in two modes, either a tournament style single player game or a grudge match where two players can interact. - switch the comma out with a colon, remove “either” as it’s unnecessary, and hyphenate single-player.
Richly detailed – same as before
Wikilink Springfield as it’s the first time it appears in the body.
Wikilink taunt as some readers may not understand the term in this context.
Development
At the E3 Media and Business Summit in 2000 – it was known as Electronic Entertainment Expo at that time
PlayStation video game console – same as before
March 12, 2001, - comma not necessary after the date
United States and Canada – North America is better IMO
I would wikilink "interactive entertainment".
Reception
receiving an aggregated score of 32% on Metacritic. - This is already in the reviews table, so it seems unnecessary.
Nothing from Game Rankings?
I replaced Metacritic with Game Rankings in the reception section.
the game's gameplay – Cut ”game’s”
and commented that game is "fun" because the comedy is straight from the television show, and that the characters will "bring a smile to your face". – Reads a little awkward to me. Change it to something like: and thought it was "fun" because the comedy is straight from the television show, and the characters will "bring a smile to your face".
Reiner also commented positively on the audio track by saying that the only enjoyment garnered in the game is from it. – You’ve already used “audio track” so I suggest using “soundtrack” this time.
British Broadcasting Corporation redirects to BBC. Also, I think most people recognise it by its acronym
After reading through the reception section, it seems the game received mostly negative reviews and not a mixed reception. You may want to change that.
Once these issues have been addressed, I'll take another look at the article.
The Prince (
talk) 06:03, 3 January 2009 (UTC)reply
Thanks for the review! To make it easier, I crossed over the things I'm done with. Please take another look at the article now. :) Cheers,
TheLeftorium 10:45, 3 January 2009 (UTC)reply
Looks good. I'm passing the article.
The Prince (
talk) 12:34, 3 January 2009 (UTC)reply