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Season five needs editing, as there is speculation included in the description. There is also the line "Let's see what happens with the gang!!" which, in my opinion, is rather unprofessional; a factual, objective article should not be used for promotional means.
I'll be reviewing this article. I'll have a full review back shortly. Looking quickly over the article it looks good generally, though there are a few minor issues that will need to be cleared up. I will be making edits as I see fit while I read through. If you have issue with any, please feel free to bring them up here. upstateNYer01:36, 24 September 2010 (UTC)reply
The first sentence of the lead tells you immediately who created the show. This information is useful to about 1.34% of readers. A rewrite of the first paragraph would be useful such that within the first two or three sentences, the reader gets an idea of what the show is about. The extra information should be included after that (this just equates to a rearrangement of information, basically—no big deal).
The comparison to Gossip Girl should be explained: "...beating that night's episode of Gossip Girl...". Add a parenthetical if you're trying to say that it is a major competitor, i.e. "...beating that night's episode of Gossip Girl (one of the show's major competitors in the time slot)..."; competitor is probably not the right word. I trust you'll come up with it.
Series Overview:
I presume that "John" is the baby's name, but that's not made explicit in either paragraph; can you make this known?
Cast and characters:
This sentence needs to be rewritten so the meaning is clearer and it's no longer a run-on: "Though she believes it is her boyfriend's, due to her husband's vasectomy, it is revealed that he lied about having the surgery."
Generally speaking, I would suggest switching the character name and actor name placement. Most readers will probably be looking for character names first, so if the are labeled first, it will make it easier for the reader.
Double check ages. Let's choose a consistent one: go with "seventeen-year-old" as opposed to "17-year-old" or "17 year-old". There was some inconsistency which I think I fixed, but I might have missed one. All fixed
Production:
"Secret Life is number one with the network's key demographic in its debut time slot versus cable television shows." ← Please rewrite that so its meaning is clearer; I'm not entirely sure what you mean by it.
The phrase "more than a decade ago" needs to be updated to "in 19XX". Ten years from now that phrase would be invalid (or at least not entirely accurate).
Unsure what the phrase "script on spec" means. Can you define it in the prose?
Please wikilink Starcom. I'm not sure which of the dambig pages it should go to. Linked to company that owns them. (They don't have a wiki article yet)
I would add "NCOPTUP" after the group's full name, but it doesn't seem to match up correctly. Can you resolve this?
A few paragraphs (especially quotes) need inline sources.
General:
Decide how you want to refer to the seasons. You have all of the following (using season 1 as an example): "Season One", "Season 1", "season one", and "season 1". Pick one and stay consistent.
After this review, regardless of whether it passes or fails, I would suggest requesting a review by the
Guild of Copyeditors. They're usually pretty quick to respond, and another pair of eyes is always helpful.
Ref #24: this goes to a pay site (login required). Do you have access? ). No link is needed if it's just going to bring me to a login site, but article information is a necessity. Ref was redundant, and since I don't have access just removed it.
Also, please format like the rest of your references ({{cite web}}
Well that stinks. Pretty good article too. Heh, this would happen on my first GA review. Anyway, when you have time to respond, give me poke on my talk page. upstateNYer03:13, 28 September 2010 (UTC)reply
Sorry, time has gone on for a while, so I'm going to fail this. However, this will probably be an easy article to pass if someone wants to put some time into it in the near future. upstateNYer14:18, 8 October 2010 (UTC)reply
So in the beginning of the article it states that the shows upcoming sixth season will be it's last. Is this a typo?? I was under the impression that the show was canceled after season 5.
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