"with his tag team partner Cody Rhodes." insert a comma after "partner"
Check.
Works for me
"He won the Fusion Pro Tag Team Championship with his half brother, Mike, in February 2007, and also toured Japan briefly with Pro Wrestling Noah, before signing a developmental contract with WWE in July 2007." Try to break this down into two sentences.
Make a small note that Manu was released. Otherwise we're left wondering what happened to him.
The lead shouldn't give any info. away, than in the main body of the text.
I agree with 'Blue, it's not necessary in the lead in my opinion. ♥
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Heart♥ 21:58, 18 August 2009 (UTC)reply
I really do think so. It's confusing to randomly drop Manu's name and not leave even a brief note. Maybe say something like "Ted joined Cody and Randy (without Manu) to form The Legacy." It's just confusing, because it doesn't tell me if Manu is gone, or if he was a hidden member, or what.
It seems really unnecessary to say "without Manu". Surely if he's not named as a member, it's obvious he's not in the group? ♥
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Heart♥ 22:42, 18 August 2009 (UTC)reply
If you say so. It's not a big deal. iMatthewtalk at 15:18, 22 August 2009 (UTC)reply
Write out Mike's full name.
Check.
Works for me
Prose
Write out Mike's full name again.
Done.
Works for me
"received professional wrestling training with Chris Youngblood in" - change "with" to "from"
Works for me
Done.
"DiBiase and Mike" make it "Ted and Mike" (a few occasions)
Why? It's standard to use his last name, I don't find it confusing, and this format is used in both
Matt Hardy and
Jeff Hardy with no objections. ♥
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Heart♥ 21:58, 18 August 2009 (UTC)reply
Because their both DiBiase's. It just makes sense that if you're using one of their first names, you should use both of their first names. Would it sound better to say "Obama and Michelle" or "Barack and Michelle." The second one, IMO.
I still disgaree, so I've reworded it to "the DiBiase brothers" which I believe is an acceptable compromise.
Works for me
Why is KENTA notable enough to be included in that sentence? If he's not, remove him. If he is, explain why it's important that Ted wrestled him.
"so he could film the direct to DVD movie, The Marine 2." - it should be linked to
Direct-to-video not
DVD
Done.
Works for me
"at Backlash," -> "at the Backlash pay-per-view"
Done.
Works for me
There should be a note of the new rivalry with HHH/HBK. Just a small note that they began a direct rivalry with DX and will compete against them at SummerSl
Its a future event.
Again, I agree with 'Blue. They haven't done anything notable with DX yet, and SS is a future event. ♥
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Heart♥ 21:58, 18 August 2009 (UTC)reply
Who cares if it's a future event? However, I won't make a fuss about it. iMatthewtalk at 22:07, 18 August 2009 (UTC)reply
"straight-to-DVD project" - be consistent. use either "direct-to-DVD" or "straight-to-DVD in the spots it's mentioned in the article.
The "managers" section can be removed. It was mentioned in the article, and is only one person. Therefore, it's redundant to list there.
It's the standard and accepted format to have it there, the fact that his manager is already listed in the prose is irrelevant. Managers are often listed in both the prose and the In wrestling section. ♥
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Heart♥ 21:58, 18 August 2009 (UTC)reply
I disagree. It's pointless to name it twice if it's already mentioned in the main prose. iMatthewtalk at 22:07, 18 August 2009 (UTC)reply
In that case, I'd suggest you take it up at WT:PW, and have the managers removed from the In wrestling section altogether. Until then, I see no reason to go against the standard applied to all wrestling articles. For example,
Jeff Hardy. All the managers listed in the in wrestling section are mentioned in the prose as well, and yet no mention has ever been made of its redundancy. ♥
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Heart♥ 22:42, 18 August 2009 (UTC)reply
Not a big deal, especially not worth going to that page over. iMatthewtalk at 15:18, 22 August 2009 (UTC)reply
"DiBiase and Cody Rhodes (left) as World Tag Team Champions." - Add (right) after DiBiase.
Done.
Works for me
Hope this helps. Good luck with the review! iMatthewtalk at 17:39, 16 August 2009 (UTC)reply
Thanks for the review. I've gotten half of the concerns, I'll let Nici do the rest, since she's more familiar with the article. --
ThinkBlue (HitBLUE) 01:45, 17 August 2009 (UTC)reply