Talk:Raymond_Howard_(Wiccan)/GA1 References

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 ( talk · contribs) 18:47, 24 August 2016 (UTC) reply

Going to review this article. MWright96 (talk) 18:47, 24 August 2016 (UTC) reply

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b ( MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a ( reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c ( OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a ( major aspects): b ( focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b ( appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

"This was up the road from Dumbledene," - up the road sounds informal
- Changed to "located near to". Midnightblueowl ( talk) 11:13, 25 August 2016 (UTC) reply

"and they had placed an advert" - advertisement
- Done. Midnightblueowl ( talk) 11:13, 25 August 2016 (UTC) reply

"and taught "Eight Paths of Magick", which was similar to the Eightfold Path taught in Gardnerian Wicca." - reptition of "taught"
- Changed first "taught" to "promulgated". Midnightblueowl ( talk) 11:11, 25 August 2016 (UTC) reply

"the racer Donald Campbell" - clarify what sort of racer Campbell was
- Replaced with "race car driver". Midnightblueowl ( talk) 11:11, 25 August 2016 (UTC) reply

remove the hyphen from cash-box
- Done. Midnightblueowl ( talk) 11:11, 25 August 2016 (UTC) reply

Overall a good read. On hold. MWright96 (talk) 20:16, 24 August 2016 (UTC) reply

Many thanks for the review, MWright96! Midnightblueowl ( talk) 11:13, 25 August 2016 (UTC) reply

Midnightblueowl Thanks. I agree with the suggestions you have raised. Promoting to GA class. MWright96 (talk) 11:31, 25 August 2016 (UTC) reply