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Beginning review. References look OK, but I do worry about the completeness of the article as a whole; some style points also. - Jarry1250 ( t, c) 19:11, 16 April 2009 (UTC)
This article had some way to go before it can be declared a good article, but the challenges are not insurmountable.
- It is reasonably well written.
- a (prose):
b (
MoS):
- The lead section needs a re-write; the rest of the prose leaves a feeling of needing a thorough read-through for consistency (capitalisation in particular). There are
external links in the body of the article; the
See also section sticks out like a sore thumb - is it entirely necessary?
- I have rewritten the lead, I hope it is much improved. Which capitalisation worries you? the only external links are to downloadable works by Carpenter - I thought that they wee OK, have seen in many other articles. See also section, I thought those links relevant. The wikisource link should also be in that section. Jezhotwells ( talk) 21:27, 17 April 2009 (UTC)
- Well, I would remove the external links from the works section, put that above the see also section (which is looking more in proportion now with the rest of the article). I think you've fixed the capitalisation. -
Jarry1250 (
t,
c) 13:26, 18 April 2009 (UTC)
- I have removed the EL, and added an EL to works in the EL section. Jezhotwells ( talk) 15:10, 18 April 2009 (UTC)
- The lead section needs a re-write; the rest of the prose leaves a feeling of needing a thorough read-through for consistency (capitalisation in particular). There are
external links in the body of the article; the
See also section sticks out like a sore thumb - is it entirely necessary?
- a (prose):
- It is factually accurate and
verifiable.
- a (references): b (citations to
reliable sources): c (
OR):
- No major concerns here; however, Early life, paragraph one, and "After her father's death in 1840..." (Teaching, paragraph 1) should be referenced in some fashion. A wider range of sources would also be appropriate; you should consider de-linking the publishers / being more accurate ('history.ac.uk'?) and get rid of the caps in the last ref. No need for "Ltd" in publisher's name.
- I have referenced those. Jezhotwells ( talk) 21:27, 17 April 2009 (UTC)
- No major concerns here; however, Early life, paragraph one, and "After her father's death in 1840..." (Teaching, paragraph 1) should be referenced in some fashion. A wider range of sources would also be appropriate; you should consider de-linking the publishers / being more accurate ('history.ac.uk'?) and get rid of the caps in the last ref. No need for "Ltd" in publisher's name.
- a (references):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- I would like to see - and I think it is quite possible to write - a little more than at present. At the moment, it feels like an outline piece of an already narrowly defined topic, something I think it inherits from the 1911 piece. Wikipedia is not a paper encyclopaedia, and should not be such constrained. The best example of this is the Europe and America paragraph, which invites many questions about what exactly it was that she managed to accomplish. In India: "many of her proposed schemes" and in Europe and America: "many of the reforms" - what reforms? what schemes? You're going to have to sing her praises (in the form of NPOV statements of fact) a little more than that ;).
- I hope the extensive re-write has addressed those concerns. Jezhotwells ( talk)
- I would like to see - and I think it is quite possible to write - a little more than at present. At the moment, it feels like an outline piece of an already narrowly defined topic, something I think it inherits from the 1911 piece. Wikipedia is not a paper encyclopaedia, and should not be such constrained. The best example of this is the Europe and America paragraph, which invites many questions about what exactly it was that she managed to accomplish. In India: "many of her proposed schemes" and in Europe and America: "many of the reforms" - what reforms? what schemes? You're going to have to sing her praises (in the form of NPOV statements of fact) a little more than that ;).
- a (major aspects):
21:27, 17 April 2009 (UTC)
- It follows the
neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- It would be nice to have a little more about the criticism - 'anti-Catholic' seems a little generic. Who were the critics? Did they have their own axes to grind?
- Can't really reference the critics directly, there was a passing reference in the Madge Dresser article, so I have removed that statement. Jezhotwells ( talk) 21:27, 17 April 2009 (UTC)
- It would be nice to have a little more about the criticism - 'anti-Catholic' seems a little generic. Who were the critics? Did they have their own axes to grind?
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars etc.:
- No edit wars etc.:
- It is illustrated by
images, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have
fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with
suitable captions):
- Unless the photographer(s) are notable, no need to attribute them in the captions. By the way, those images could do with a bit of Photoshop'ing. I might do it myself, or ask any of the Wikipedia guilds to lend a hand.
- I have done some work on the images and adjusted the captions. Jezhotwells ( talk) 21:27, 17 April 2009 (UTC)
- Unless the photographer(s) are notable, no need to attribute them in the captions. By the way, those images could do with a bit of Photoshop'ing. I might do it myself, or ask any of the Wikipedia guilds to lend a hand.
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have
fair use rationales):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- 'On hold: let's give improving the article a go first. The major points are listed above, minor ones should become obvious over time. Jezhotwells, go get someone else to read it (and to help!) - it's clear you've put a lot of work in so far. Or 20 people, or 50. Fresh eyes would definitely help.
- Pass/Fail:
Feel free to message me in order to prompt more feedback. - Jarry1250 ( t, c) 19:57, 16 April 2009 (UTC)
Update
I've replied above and tweaked some of the ratings. Definitely moving in the right direction, particularly on the coverage front. - Jarry1250 ( t, c) 13:26, 18 April 2009 (UTC)