You need to ensure that material you cover in the lead is at least re-covered in the article and (preferably) expanded, e.g. you go straight into her career without mentioning her birth date and place in the prose. Is there anything else about her early life we can find?
There's very little - but there is enough to cover what's in the lede. Added Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski(
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"After finishing third at the Russian Under 18 Championship 2008 " she must have only been nine years old! Worth a mention.
I wasn't sure if she was eight or nine, sources don't say. I've added a mention Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski(
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"Under 18 Championship 2008 in Eight-ball, " usually expect to see "Under-18" hyphenated, and that "Eight" should be "eight".
" Tkach moved in 2009 to the Straight pool Moscow Under 18 City Championship final,...." runs on too much and this reads a little odd "moved in 2009 to the Straight pool..." and "Straight" doesn't need capitalisation here.
"At the ladies city championship, lost in the final" sentence is missing a "she" and is this championship a "thing", i.e. is that what it's called, because I'd expect it to be (at the least) "ladies' city championship" if not be capitalised if it's a proper title.
"after she was eliminated in the final round in 14.1 in the first round and in the 10-ball in the quarterfinals, she reached the final of 8-ball," horrible sentence, can we re-work?
" defeating Marharyta Fjafilawa 7–3, winning her first" perhaps to avoid so many "ing ing" constructions, this (and others) could be rephrased along the lines of " defeating Marharyta Fjafilawa 7–3, to win her first"...?
"As runner-up of the one-year ranking of the Euro Tour after the Portugal Open," does this really mean "After finishing second in the one-year rankings on the Euro Tour..."?
I've gone through these. Just working on an early life section.
Thanks for taking a good look at this one
TRM, I appreciate this one needed some work. I think I've got through this one (ignore the ref errors, it's site wide). Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski(
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