One of my fav Dev songs! The article is on hold for seven days. :)
Lead
Lead needs to be shortened down to two paragraphs per
WP:LEAD. 11 KB of readable prose is not enough for a 3-para lead. I suggest trimming down on commercial performance and music video info.
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"was Dev wanting to make a sexy song to show that she is a grown woman." - revise the tone.
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"American rapper Flo Rida is featured on an official remix of the song and Dev chose to collaborate with the rapper as she believed she would enjoy the song more when hearing it on the radio." → "Dev collaborated with American rapper Flo Rida on an official remix as she believed she would enjoy the remix when hearing it on the radio."
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"Musically, "In the Dark" is a dance-pop song"
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"with most of them highlighting" → "who highlighted"
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"peaking at number eleven" - Numbers above 9 are written numerically. See also: "Elsewhere, the song peaked in the top forty"
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"who regularly makes videos for Dev and The Cataracs" → "who often directs videos for Dev and The Cataracs"
"The clip features shots of dozens of black-painted hands" - remove "dozens of"; not needed.
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"that are touching Dev" → "that touch Dev"
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Background
"consisting of Niles Hollowell-Dhar and David Singer-Vine" -> "a group that consists of Niles Hollowell-Dhar and David Singer-Vine"
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"'I wanted a remix with a rapper on it, because I thought it would suit it well. I know if I heard 'In The Dark' on the radio with a rapper on it, I would probably enjoy it more. We went in thinking about who would be cool on the radio and who would fit the fact that it's kind of a flavorful song and not really a hood rap song. Flo Rida fit, and he completely killed it.'" - that's a very long quote. I suggest trimming it down and paraphrasing some of it.
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Suggest trimming down many of the long quotations.
Composition
"'In the Dark' is a dance-pop song featuring Eurodance beats and synths" → "'In the Dark' is a dance-pop song that features Eurodance beats and synths"
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"with Dev repeating" → "as Dev repeats"
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"sexy lyrics and the saxophone hook" Do you mean "sexual lyrics"?