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Reviewer: MarioSoulTruthFan ( talk · contribs) 17:23, 14 May 2020 (UTC)
Infobox
- Add release date of the album
- hi-NRG → not on given source (see below)
Done
Lead
- and was co-produced by Mike Dean → so is he a producer or co-producer?
- It includes experimental pop, disco and hi-NRG sounds → It is an experimental pop, disco and hi-NRG song
- critics → music critics + wikilik to music journalism
- director of the music video?
Done
- Do you mind adding another positive take to the music critic portion here?
- I've mentioned the comparisons to 'Bohemian Rhapsody', let me know if it's OK
- You are taking it a bit out of context there. Just remove it. MarioSoulTruthFan ( talk) 18:45, 15 May 2020 (UTC)
Done
Background and composition
- instruments and singing → instruments, singing
- (2005); Mike Dean → (2005), as well as Mike Dean
- "God Control" was written by Madonna and Ahmadzaï. It was produced by Madonna, Ahmadzaï and Mike Dean → "God Control" was written by Madonna and Ahmadzaï and produced by the latter two along with Mike Dean
- It belongs to the Experimental pop, disco and hi-NRG genres → It has been described as an Experimental pop, disco and hi-NRG song
- hi-NRG → not on given source
- Mentioned on The Guardian source: "God Control was presumably made after an all-nighter on Reddit – a rambling “Wake up sheeple! [...] And all of it set to hi-NRG disco with cascading strings and Daft Punk vocoders"
- Musically... → vocodered vocals → add as well, from The Irish Times source
- Let me know if how I added it is correct
- It is fine. MarioSoulTruthFan ( talk) 18:17, 15 May 2020 (UTC)
- What follows is → It is followed by
Done
Reception
- critics → music critics
- 'Bohemian Rhapsody'". → "Bohemian Rhapsody"."
- Did this for all reviews as I can't just change one and leave the others. Let me know if it's oK
- Its ok. MarioSoulTruthFan ( talk) 15:52, 15 May 2020 (UTC)
Done
Background and synopsis
- Thousand Oaks shootings.[20][23][25][24] → four source in a row make the text very clunky, lets make a maximum of three
- Regarding the statement above, a full stop midsentece would do the trick with the respective sources.
- across the screen → remove
- The image should appear first
- What do you mean @
MarioSoulTruthFan:?--
Christian (
talk)
17:47, 15 May 2020 (UTC)
- I mean put the image on top of the section.
MarioSoulTruthFan (
talk)
17:52, 15 May 2020 (UTC)
- I decided tu put the image there, as it was next to the actual synopsis of the video, but I've changed it.-- Christian ( talk) 17:56, 15 May 2020 (UTC)
- I mean put the image on top of the section.
MarioSoulTruthFan (
talk)
17:52, 15 May 2020 (UTC)
Done
Reception
- There is no need for the quote box to disrupte another section, it could be above or make it a litlle bit bigger
- I left it here as it looked (on my computer) aesthetically pleasing, it didn't 'cut' or overlapped text or the other section. Let me know if I should change it.
- So it depends on the screen I see, move it to the top of the section like the previous image.
MarioSoulTruthFan (
talk)
18:31, 15 May 2020 (UTC)
- All done @ MarioSoulTruthFan: (I've also made it a little wider.-- Christian ( talk) 19:52, 15 May 2020 (UTC)
- So it depends on the screen I see, move it to the top of the section like the previous image.
MarioSoulTruthFan (
talk)
18:31, 15 May 2020 (UTC)
- Ryan Reed from Rolling Stone quotes are giving a copyright violation of 54% you need to fix that, use your own words.
- Same as previous apply to People magazine quotes but in much lesser degree
- Let me know if this and previous points are correct now
- using her "platform" to raise awareness → I don't unsertand this, can you explain it?
- That's how the sources quotes it; changed it to "bringing awareness", let me know if it's correct
- Much better. MarioSoulTruthFan ( talk) 18:31, 15 May 2020 (UTC)
Done
Live performances
- Madonna then appeared decked in a Revolutionary War attire → not on given source
- From Variety Source: ...like when she does the Hustle in the aforementioned Revolutionary War costume during “God Control”
Done
Credits and personnel
- Mastering and mixing?
- I tried to search for the album's complete credits but I couldn't find them; the liner notes don't list the either. Just the writers, producers and backing vocals
- It's fine. MarioSoulTruthFan ( talk) 15:53, 15 May 2020 (UTC)
Done
References
- Wikilink the first instance of Billboard
- Muumuse doesn't strike me as a reliable source, with an entire section dedicated to Britney Spears. So please remove it.
- Junkee. Junkee Media → Junkee (it is redudant)
- BBC News. BBC → BBC News (same as previous)
- thebacklot.com → TheBacklot
Done
External links
- Fine
Overall
I had some doubts this could have been a single, ut I have seent the comments above. MarioSoulTruthFan ( talk) 18:32, 15 May 2020 (UTC)
- All done with the comments @
MarioSoulTruthFan:! I look forward to the rest regarding the music video! Thank you!! --
Christian (
talk)
15:54, 15 May 2020 (UTC)
- All done @
MarioSoulTruthFan:! Just have a couple of comments/questions I hope you can clear up :) --
Christian (
talk)
18:14, 15 May 2020 (UTC)
- @ Chrishm21: three issues to address and then its good to go.
- I've fixed the lead section @
MarioSoulTruthFan:; what other issues need addressing? o: --
Christian (
talk)
18:59, 15 May 2020 (UTC)
- @ MarioSoulTruthFan: I think I finally got the reduction of the Rolling Stone 'violation' fixed; let me know if it works. Also, out of topic, but I seem to remember there was a tool here in wiki that helped you see how much quotations you were using on an article, do you know which one is it?-- Christian ( talk) 19:26, 15 May 2020 (UTC)
- All done @
MarioSoulTruthFan:! Just have a couple of comments/questions I hope you can clear up :) --
Christian (
talk)
18:14, 15 May 2020 (UTC)
- It fine now has the quotes are from Maddona and the music video. I have no clue, I'm sorry. MarioSoulTruthFan ( talk) 19:43, 15 May 2020 (UTC)