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1. Well-written:
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1a. the prose is clear, concise, and
understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.
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Lead
Maybe wikilink "transistorised" to "transistor"?
Wikilink "foldback".
Maybe wikilink "rocker switches" to "rocker switch"? (Redirects to "switch").
Production
Features
The G-101 had two square, tubular, fold-out legs, and a "drop panel" that acted both as support for the legs when standing (via thumb screws that secured the panel to tabs on the back of the legs) and also as a cover for the folded-in legs during transport. This sentence is quite long. I'd suggest splitting into two, e.g. The G-101 had two square, tubular, fold-out legs, and a "drop panel". The drop panel acted both as support for the legs when standing, via thumb screws that secured the panel to tabs on the back of the legs, and also as a cover for the folded-in legs during transport.
and a vinyl/fabric-covered plywood cabinet What does the forward slash mean in this sentence? Does it mean the cabinet was both vinyl and fabric-covered plywood? Or that the material itself was a mixture of vinyl and fabric? Or that it changed between models? Are you able to clarify this (and probably remove the slash)? Thanks :)
Wikilink "TRS jack".
Sound
The main section offers 16', 8', 4' and 2⅔' footages I'm not sure an unfamiliar reader would necessarily know what "footages" refers to here. Is there a relevant article on organ pipes that you could link to? Or add an explanation.
reed, string and flute voices Could you maybe wikilink to
Flue pipe#tonal groups? Maybe it's a bit too distant from the article (pipe organ rather than electric), but it goes some way to explain what those voices refer to.
(Yellow) Trumpet 8'; Kinura 8' I'm not sure that "trumpet" should be linked to the article about trumpet the musical instrument. Much like "reed, string and flute", does "trumpet" not refer to what would be the type of pipe on a traditional organ?
Wikilink "tremolo".
The "Glide" effect pitches the notes flat by a half-step Maybe wikilink "flat" and/or "half-step"?
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1b. it complies with the
Manual of Style guidelines for
lead sections,
layout,
words to watch,
fiction, and
list incorporation.
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Lead sections
As per
MOS:BOLDALTNAMES, only the first instance of Kalamazoo K-101 (in the lead) should be in bold. So instance in "Production" can be unbolded.
Layout
Layout, including headings, looks good.
External links - Not sure if linking to blogs is common practice. I wouldn't use it as a citation, but is it a recognised reliable source?
External links - Also not sure why an MP3 of Lucy in the Sky with Diamonds played on the Lowrey T-2 is particularly important (other than the fact that it may sounds similar to the G-101). A sample of the G-101 would be more relevant, if one exists.
Now that the reference to "Lucy in the Sky with Diamonds" has been removed, I'd also remove this external link.
Words to watch
The expression pedal is important This statement is on the cusp of being a "word to watch". I'd suggest removing and just saying Without the expression pedal the organ will make no sound...
List incorporation
List in the "Sound" section is suitable.
Fiction
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2.
Verifiable with no original research:
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2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with
the layout style guideline.
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In-line citations throughout. Appropriate "Reference" heading with citations and sources in subheadings. Will do a final check at the end.
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2b.
reliable sources are
cited inline. All content that
could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).
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Lenhoff & Robertson, 2019
The 1/4" TRS jack also enabled users to connect a Gibson "Sabre" amp, or one of two external reverb units made by both Gibson and Maestro, as well as to any standard guitar or keyboard amplifier. The "Reverb" tab is used to activate one of these; the organ itself has no onboard reverb unit. I can't see that this is backed up by Ref [11] - can you confirm? Might need to cite a different page (or I've missed something on the page!).
The instrument's top had a removable, fold-down wire rack for sheet music Can't find the information on the page (Ref [6]) - do let me know if I'm missing something.
Found it, the ref should be pp.202-203, not just p.203.
The top three octaves uses the main set of voicing. Reviewing this statement alongside the source, I'm not entirely sure what you mean here?
Because the G-101 was manufactured by Lowrey, its electronics – and thus, its voicings – are similar to Lowrey's own T-1 and T-2 models (all of which use the same generator boards as the Lowrey TLO ["Holiday"] spinet models); the G-101 is not, however, identical and does contain several additional distinctive features. Should the reference here be for pp.197-199? P.198 discusses the T-1 whereas p. 197 and p.199 do not. Also I cannot see a reference to the Lowrey TLO "Holiday" model on those pages.
A Lowrey Heritage Deluxe DSO organ, using the "Harpsichord" tab, was used by the Beatles to perform the opening measures of their song Lucy in the Sky With Diamonds. Because of its similarity to that model, the G-101 can be used to simulate that performance. Can't see from the source specifically that the G-101 can be used to simulate the performance?
In that case, I'd remove the external link to the MP3 file of "Lucy in the Sky With Diamonds" played on the Lowrey T-2.
Combo Organ Heaven
In general, what makes this website reliable? Is it a respected source in the world of combo organs? Would be good to see some evidence to this effect.
A Gibson G-202 organ was introduced at the same time, which is a spinet organ with two manuals, but otherwise has the same electronics, but not as many features. There doesn't seem to be any mention of the G-202 in the source cited?
This feature often faded in functionality because it used a "photo-cell" ... Putting the word "photo-cell" in quotes implies that it is a direct quote from the source but I can't see it anywhere.
G-101 Gibson Portable Organ Service Manual
Vail & Carson, 2000
I don't have access to this source, but a 1993 edition is available via the Internet Archive. I will use this as a rough proxy.
Can't see any problems with this source.
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2c. it contains
no original research.
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All statements backed up with appropriate citations. Will do a final check at the end.
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2d. it contains no
copyright violations or
plagiarism.
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Nothing of concern when checking sources.
Copyvio detector brings up a possible violation, but it is due to a properly-attributed quote and replication of technical information.
Will do a final check at the end.
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3. Broad in its coverage:
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3a. it addresses the
main aspects of the topic.
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Covers background, technical information, and usage. Nothing else of major importance identified when reviewing sources. Content that the main aspects are covered.
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3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see
summary style).
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Content that there is not unnecessary detail.
Done
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4.
Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.
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Content that the article is presented neutrally.
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5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing
edit war or content dispute.
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Majority of recent edits are by nominator and are constructive. No evidence of edit warring.
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6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as
images,
video, or
audio:
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6a. media are
tagged with their
copyright statuses, and
valid non-free use rationales are provided for
non-free content.
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Image of G-101 has valid copyright tag.
I just require clarification on the image of Ray Manzarek. It has a copyright tag, but I do not know how to check if a) the image (or TV show) was not published in the U.S. within 30 days, b) it was first published without copyright notice, c) it was public domain in Denmark in 1996. Are you able to help here?
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6b. media are
relevant to the topic, and have
suitable captions.
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Captions are good.
Both require alternative descriptions.
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7. Overall assessment.
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- Thank you for addressing everything so quickly and clearly. Very happy to promote this to GA now, well done!
Unexpectedlydian♯4
talk‽ 18:39, 2 July 2022 (UTC)
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