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Nominator: ChrisTofu11961 ( talk · contribs) 17:33, 22 October 2023 (UTC) reply

Reviewer: Tbhotch ( talk · contribs) 19:23, 17 June 2024 (UTC) reply


Upcoming review.

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

  1. Is it reasonably well written?
    A. Prose quality (prose is clear and concise, without exceeding quotations, or spelling and grammar errors):
    Multiple phrases can be shortened, summarized or merged with other ones.
    B. MoS compliance (including, but not limited to: lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists):
    Some basic errors with weasel vagueness
  2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
    A. References to sources (including an appropriate reference section):
    Pending
    B. Citation of available and reliable sources where necessary (including direct quotations):
    Pending
    C. No original research:
    Pending
    D. No copyright violations:
    Earwig reports too many issues due to the overuse of quotes
  3. Is it broad in its coverage?
    A. Major aspects:
    The article includes relevant information required in a biography
    B. Focused:
    The article doesn't divert to trivialities and remains focused on Harris's life
  4. Is it neutral?
    Fair representation without bias:
    Occasional unattributed vagueness that causes unnecessary flattery to a popular artist.
  5. Is it stable?
    edit wars, multiple edits not related to the GAN process, etc. (this excludes blatant vandalism):
    No issues
  6. Does it contain images (or other media) to illustrate (or support) the topic?
    A. Images (and other media) are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
    The images are correctly tagged and there are no immediate copyright violations or any reason to assume their uploaders / authors are violating third parties
    B. Images (and other media) are provided where possible and are relevant, with suitable captions:
    The images are relevant and added in the correct sections.
  7. Overall:
    Pass or Fail:
Lead
  • "A highly regarded figure in contemporary music" → WP:WEASEL
  • "Harris is considered one of the leading music artists behind the country rock genre" → Weasel. You can refer to Madonna or Lady Gaga, or others, to see how this is solved with prominent artists
  • "an interest in folk music in her early years which led to her performing" → "an interest in folk music in her early years, which led to her performing"
  • "Moving to New York City in the 1960s," → "After moving to New York City in the 1960s,"
  • "Follow-up 1970s albums further elevated Harris' career such as" → "Follow-up 1970s albums further elevated Harris' career, such as"
  • "she had acquired four number one songs" → "she had acquired four number-one songs"
  • "Her backing group The Hot Band" → "Her backing group, the Hot Band," ( MOS:THEMUSIC)
  • "album was also a critical success that spawned four top ten singles." → "album was also a critical success that spawned four top-ten singles."
  • "several albums of self-composed material like" → "several albums of self-composed material, like"
  • "placed 27 singles into the" → "placed 27 singles in the"
Early life
  • "Harris was born in Birmingham, Alabama in 1947" → "Harris was born in Birmingham, Alabama, in 1947"
  • "Her father was a Marine Corps officer." → too short, you can merge it
  • "he was taken as a Prisoner of War" → it is not a proper title
  • "Cherry Point, North Carolina and" → "Cherry Point, North Carolina, and"
  • "She also helped form a folk music duo called The Emerald City" → "She also helped form a folk music duo called the Emerald City"
  • "Harris briefly moved to Virginia Beach where" → "Harris briefly moved to Virginia Beach, where"
  • "where she worked as a waitress and sang" → Did you mean singer?
  • "New York City's Greenwich Village neighborhood where" → "New York City's Greenwich Village neighborhood, where"
  • "In 1969, Harris married for the first time and soon gave birth to her first child" → You can mention Tom here and use his last name subsequently.
1969–1974
  • "She worked several notable Greenwich Village clubs," → "She worked at several notable Greenwich Village clubs,"
  • "her debut studio album Gliding Bird in 1970" → "her debut studio album, Gliding Bird, in 1970
  • "along with one penned by her first husband Tom Slocum." → "along with one penned by her first husband, Tom Slocum."
  • "Harris attempted to support herself and her daughter by working as waitress." → "Harris attempted to support herself and her daughter by working as a waitress."
  • "Ultimately, she returned to live with her parents who had settled in the Washington, D.C. suburb of Clarksville, Maryland" → "Ultimately, she went back to live with her parents in the Maryland suburb of Clarksville, near Washington, D.C."
  • "following performing at clubs in Washington, D.C." → "following performing at clubs in Washington, D.C.,"
  • "Parsons' friends were discussing Harris at a Washington D.C." → "Parsons' friends were discussing Harris at a Washington, D.C.,"
  • "At the time singer-songwriter Gram Parsons (formerly of The Byrds and the Flying Burrito Brothers who was establishing a solo career)" → "At the time, singer-songwriter Gram Parsons (formerly of the Byrds and the Flying Burrito Brothers, who was establishing a solo career)
  • "One year later, he sent her a plane ticket to Los Angeles, California, where she recorded harmony vocals for his debut album, G.P."
  • "Harris also toured as a member of Parsons's band (the Fallen Angels) in 1973, and vocal harmonies and duets with him." → "Harris also toured as a member of Parsons's band (the Fallen Angels) in 1973, and performed vocal harmonies and duets with him."
  • "and had fascination with classic country music." → "and had a fascination with classic country music."
  • "His passion for the genre was influential to Harris and she soon was learning about the country genre" → "His passion for the genre was influential on Harris and she soon learned about the country genre"
  • "Parsons' next album titled Grievous Angel." → "Parsons' next album, titled Grievous Angel.
  • "died of a drug and alcohol overdose in a hotel room" → he died from
  • "One more album of recorded material from that period was packaged as Live 1973, but was not released until 1982" → wrong comma
  • Not required, but there is a file when she studied at UNCG, File:Emmylou Harris (Miranda) Dr. Arthur Dixon (Prospero) UNC-G Theater 1966.jpg
1975–1980
  • "Although devastated by Gram Parsons' death,[23] Harris continued on as a solo artist → Could you please reword it so it doesn't sound dramatic?
  • "She made a decision" → She decided
  • "The pair would later marry in 1977" → Too short, you can merge it
  • "She contacted Canadian-based producer Brian Ahern who had" → "She contacted Canadian-based producer Brian Ahern, who had"
  • "Impressed by her, Ahern agreed to producing Harris." → "Impressed by her, Ahern agreed to produce Harris."
  • Photo: "Harris in 1976." → Harris in 1976
  • "It featured covers of songs by The Beatles" → MOS:THEMUSIC
  • "Its second single "If I Could Only Win Your Love"" → "Its second single, "If I Could Only Win Your Love","
  • "The disc's covers of Buck Owens's "Together Again" and Patsy Cline's "Sweet Dreams"" → "Sweet Dreams" is a Don Gibson song
  • "the project called The Hot Band." → MOS:THEMUSIC
  • "Along with being commercially successful, Harris' albums received praise and recognition" → Harris' albums received critical and commercial success.
  • "found Pieces of the Sky to have "many brilliant songs"[33] Jason Ankeny" → ...songs",[33] Jason Ankeny"
  • "Jason Ankeny of AllMusic found" → you used found already
  • "to Gram Parsons with "eclectic" covers" → "to Parsons with "eclectic" covers"
  • "both LP's" → wrong possessive
  • "when both LP's are played "front to back" it → "when both LP's are played "front to back", it
  • "Additionally, both LP's" → wrong possessive
  • "Additionally, both LP's would certify gold in the United States for selling over half a million copies each" → If it occurred, "Additionally, both LPs were certified gold in the United States for selling over half a million copies each"
  • "both traditional country cover tunes along with new material" → "both traditional country cover tunes and new material"
  • "issued her fourth album Luxury Liner," → "issued her fourth album, Luxury Liner,"
  • "which was her second number one American country album" → "which was her second number-one American country album"
  • "It also was her second to make the top 20" → "It was also her second album to make the top 20"
  • "which was considered to have "over-careful production"." → by whom?
  • "It was a top ten disc" → "It was a top-ten disc".
  • "the number two position of the country charts" → on the country charts
  • "Harris' new bluegrass sound was credited to new Hot Band member Ricky Skaggs," → "Harris' new bluegrass sound was credited to the new Hot Band member Ricky Skaggs,"
1981–1990
  • "Her next studio album Cimarron (1981)" → Her next studio album, Cimarron (1981),
  • "top ten and US all-genre top 50" → "top ten and the US all-genre top 50"
  • "Harris and the Hot Band recorded her first live album titled Last Date" → "Harris and the Hot Band recorded her first live album titled, Last Date"
  • "and was followed by the top five single" → "and was followed by the top-five single"
  • "Harris' final album under Brian Ahern's production was released in 1983 called White Shoes." → "Harris' final album under Ahern's production was released in 1983, called White Shoes."
  • "The pair also divorced" → Too short, so you can merge it.
  • "The disc featured a collection of songs Harris covered by other artists." → The by here sounds weird because she covered them.
  • "Harris then relocated to Nashville where" → "Harris then relocated to Nashville, where"
  • "The Ballad of Sally Rose was loosely based" → "the record was loosely based"
  • "In 1986, Warner Bros. released her next studio album titled Thirteen." → "In 1986, Warner Bros. released her next studio album, Thirteen."
  • "with comparisons draw to 1980's" → "with comparisons drawn to 1980's"
  • "However the album proved to be less successful" → "However, the album proved to be less successful"
  • "and was album of gospel material." → "and was an album of gospel material."
  • "Rolling Stone described it as a "solid but low key" gospel project." → If Rolling Stone described it as such, the sentence reads as "solid but low key gospel project" and it needs a hyphen at "low-key". So "Rolling Stone described it as a "solid but [low-key]" gospel project."
  • "record the studio album Trio." → "record the studio album, Trio."
  • "Trio reached the number one" → "Trio reached number one"
  • Photo: "In the middle 1980s, Harris collaborated alongside friends Dolly Parton and Linda Ronstadt to record the album Trio. The album was critically acclaimed and a commercial success." → Indicate who is who
  • "In 1989, Warner Bros. released the solo album Bluebird. It included material penned by songwriters Kate McGarrigle, Anna McGarrigle, along with two songs penned by Harris herself" → "In 1989, Warner Bros. released the solo album Bluebird. It included material penned by songwriters Kate McGarrigle and Anna McGarrigle, and two songs penned by Harris herself."
  • "Considered a country rock effort" → by whom
  • "Bluebird peaked in the top 20 of both the US and Canadian country charts" → "The album peaked in the top 20 of both the US and Canadian country charts"
  • "Its lead single "Heartbreak Hill" returned" → "Its lead single, "Heartbreak Hill", returned"
  • "the top 20 single "Heaven Only Knows" → "the top 20 single, "Heaven Only Knows""
  • "Her final studio album with Warner Bros. was released in 1990 titled Brand New Dance." → "Her final studio album with Warner Bros. was released in 1990, titled Brand New Dance."
  • "It was categorized as an "uninspired misfire" from Rolling Stone" → "It was categorized as an "uninspired misfire" by Rolling Stone"
  • AllMusic is linked twice and it was already linked at the 1975–1980 section
1991–1999
  • "Al Perkins playing banjo and guitar and Jon Randall" → "Al Perkins playing banjo and guitar, and Jon Randall"
  • "the former site of the Grand Ole Opry which was becoming increasingly dilapidated" → "the former site of the Grand Ole Opry, which was becoming increasingly dilapidated"
  • "The live disc was released in 1992 and titled At the Ryman" → "The live disc was released in 1992 and was titled At the Ryman"
  • "The album was met with critical acclaim" → Too short, so you can merge it.
  • "The album was said to bring renewed interest" → by whom?
  • "Despite critical acclaim its singles" → "Despite critical acclaim, its singles"
  • You can merge "Despite critical acclaim its singles received limited radio airplay. Two of its singles made the US and Canada country charts, but failed to make positions inside the top 40"
  • "Asylum Records gave her musical freedom to record her next album" → "Asylum Records gave her the musical freedom to record her next album"
  • "The disc was produced by Daniel Lanois who embedded" → "The disc was produced by Daniel Lanois, who embedded"
  • "Its production has been considered influential" → by whom?
  • "Although ignored by the country industry," → It topped UK's country chart [1]
  • "It was later given the Grammy Award for Best Contemporary Folk Album" → "It received"; and the sentence is too short, so it can be merged
  • "Jason Ankeny of AllMusic called it "a hypnotic, staggeringly beautiful work" while Allison Hussey" → Jason Ankeny of AllMusic called it "a hypnotic, staggeringly beautiful work", while Allison Hussey
  • "In 1998, Harris's third live album Spyboy was released" → "In 1998, Harris's third live album, Spyboy, was released"
  • "It was recorded with Harris's new backing band which were also" → "It was recorded with Harris's new backing band, which were also"
  • "Although the project was completed in 1994, it took five years to be released" → Missing period
  • "It also went on to certify gold in the United States" → Too short, merge it
  • "Time called the disc "an angelic encounter" while" → "Time called the disc "an angelic encounter", while"
  • "Best Country Collaboration with Vocals accolade from the Grammy's." → Wrong possessive
2000–2011
  • "2000–2011: From song interpreter to singer–songwriter" → why it uses an en dash rather than a hyphen?
  • "her first solo studio album in five years called Red Dirt Girl." → "her first solo studio album in five years, called Red Dirt Girl."
  • "that featured most self-written recordings" → "that featured the most self-written recordings"
  • " of O Brother, Where Art Thou? which won" → "O Brother, Where Art Thou?, which won a"
  • "Allmusic commented that" → It is AllMusic and it was Mark Deming
  • "spent seven years writing and recording songs which" → "spent seven years writing and recording songs, which"
  • "their collaborative studio effort All the Roadrunning" → "their collaborative studio effort, All the Roadrunning"
  • "their recordings could work as duets for a collaborative album together." → Duet, collaboration and together imply the same; this need to be reworded
  • "It featured ex-collaborator and husband Brian Ahern producing the project". → Ahern was already introduced, so you don't need to reintroduce him.
  • "her song "Boulder to Birmingham" with rock group The Fray." → MOS:THEMUSIC and "the rock"
  • "In 2010, Harris re-recorded her song "Boulder to Birmingham" with rock group The Fray. Their song was released as a single by Epic Records that year." → It can be merged
2012–present
  • I honestly don't remember the guide, essay, whatever, but sections that go like this are discouraged, so please rework this section:
In 2012, content
In 2013, content
In 2014, content
  • 2012 has three micro sentences that can be merged. Also "She recorded three songs that appeared"
  • "Although an album of duets was" → "Although a duet album was"
  • "The disc was produced by Brian Ahern." → Too short and Ahern is already known
  • "It later won a Grammy award." → Too short and you can specify the award
  • "It was followed in 2015 by the pair's second collaborative album The Traveling Kind." → "It was followed in 2015 by the pair's second collaborative album, The Traveling Kind."
  • "It was a tribute to songwriters like" sentence can be merged with the former
  • "It was given three out of five stars from Rolling Stone[106] and four out of five stars from American Songwriter. The Traveling Kind reached the top ten of the US country chart.[29]
  • Also: "Rolling Stone awarded it three stars out of five"
  • Also: by not from, unless you say receive
  • "a publishing imprint of Penguin Books" → "a Penguin Books publishing imprint"
  • "In 2021, Harris told Clash magazine that she is still writing her memoir." → "In 2021, Harris told Clash magazine that she was still writing her memoir."
  • "In 2021, Nonesuch Records released the live disc Ramble in Music City: The Lost Concert. It was recorded with The Nash Ramblers in 1990 but was shelved until 2021" Both sentences can be merged; also, MOS:THEMUSIC
  • You use "In 2021" thrice in this paragraph
  • "However, she continues to perform and play shows" is sourced to a primary source

I'm going to pause at the moment and I'll continue tomorrow. (CC)  Tbhotch ™ 04:39, 20 June 2024 (UTC) reply

Influences
  • "Another significant influence was Joan Baez.[121] Harris recalled a "spiritual" connection to Baez's music." can be merged
  • "Parsons exposed Harris to the music of The Louvin Brothers, Bill Monroe and George Jones." → MOS:THEMUSIC
  • "Harris would hire Rodney Crowell to join her band when she became a solo act. Crowell came from a traditional country background in Texas. She credited Crowell for helping further develop her artistry in the country field." Crowell, Crowell, Crowell. This can be summarized.
Musical styles
  • Harris has been largely identified with the country rock musical style → by whom?
  • Photo: "Harris performing onstage in Seattle, Washington in collaboration with Phil Madeira and Ricky Simpkins, 2008." → "in Seattle, Washington, in collaboration"
  • "a genre that is centered in roots music" → "a genre that is centered on roots music"
  • "Harris' music has also been categorized" → by whom?
  • "led Harris to be considered" → by whom?
  • "Harris has since been given the moniker of the "Godmother of Americana"" → "Harris has since been given [by whom?] the moniker "Godmother of Americana""
  • "Harris has also been identified by writers as a musician." → She is a singer, songwriter, and plays the guitar, which makes her a musician automatically. The immediate source says this only, "Country singer, songwriter and musician Emmylou Harris was born April 2, 1947, in Birmingham, Alabama.", so I don't see multiple writers acknowledging the obvious.
  • "This started with Harris' first backing group called The Hot Band" → " This started with Harris' first backing group called the Hot Band"
  • "Sheryl Crow and numerous others" → "Sheryl Crow, and numerous others"
Vocals
  • "Writers have characterized Harris' singing voice to be a soprano" → "Writers have characterized Harris' singing voice as that of a soprano."
  • "Harris singing voice has also been described as being both "delicate" and "crystalline"" → It can be merged with the former sentence
  • "Stephen Holden of The New York Times wrote "Emmylou" → Stephen Holden of The New York Times wrote, "Emmylou"
Legacy
  • "Harris is also credited for influencing the Neotraditional country sub-genre that established in the 1980s and 1990s" → "Harris is also credited with influencing the Neotraditional country sub-genre that was established in the 1980s and 1990s"
  • "Harris has also been regarded" → by whom?
  • "Along with The Statler Brothers and Tom T. Hall" → MOS:THEMUSIC
  • "Harris was presented the Cliffie Stone Pioneer Award." → "Harris was presented with the Cliffie Stone Pioneer Award."
  • "The concert featured several of Harris's closest friends and collaborators including Rodney Crowell, Alison Krauss and Lucinda Williams" → "The concert featured several of Harris's closest friends and collaborators, including Rodney Crowell, Alison Krauss, and Lucinda Williams"
Activism
  • "The program started as a way to promote research around the humanities..." → You can merge this sentence; also "in the humanities"
  • "establish a dog rescue which she named" → "establish a dog rescue, which she named"
  • "To remember him, Harris decided to establish a dog rescue which she named Bonaparte's Retreat in honor of her pet. The rescue was created to save stray dogs from animal shelters and keep them until they found their "forever home". The rescue resides in the Nashville area and often rescues dogs that are taken from the Metro Nashville Animal Care and Control facility." → These three sentences can be merged into two.
  • "Harris helps raise funds for the program by creating concerts that sponsor the rescue. The rescue" → The rescue, the rescue
Personal life
  • "but has called herself a" → "but she has called herself a"
  • "her first daughter Hallie" → "her first daughter, Hallie"
  • "Hallie spent a majority of her time" → "the majority" or simply most of her time
  • "Harris wed her then-producer Brian Ahern." → married, also, you are missing a comma
  • "her second child Meghann in 1979" → "her second child, Meghann, in 1979"
  • "She has a granddaughter who was born in 2009, and a grandson who was born in 2012." → Wrong comma. The "who was" are not needed. Also, this sentence is too short for its own paragraph
Copyright issues
  • Earwwig reports a "42.2% Violation Possible" at worst because of a quote you used in the article coupled with other album titles and some common phrases that your text and their text use. This issue is not limited to two sources, but twenty-two of them are listed above 20%. Please, reduce the quotes used throughout.

I'll continue with the last section, references, tomorrow. (CC)  Tbhotch ™ 05:06, 21 June 2024 (UTC) reply

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