Dr. Blofeld, I plan on conducting a thorough review of this article in the coming days. Upon my initial review, it looks like it meets the criteria for Good Article status. I look forward to working with you throughout this process! Please let me know if you have any questions or concerns in the meantime. --
Caponer (
talk) 03:24, 12 May 2014 (UTC)reply
GA review (see
here for what the criteria are, and
here for what they are not)
Dr. Blofeld, I've completed several re-reviews of the article, and I find that it is well-written and meets the criteria for Good Article status! I have a few comments and suggestions, which I've included below to be addressed. Once these have all been taken care of, we can commence with passage to Good Article status! Thank you for all the fantastic work you've done to improve the overall quality of this article! --
Caponer (
talk) 02:21, 13 May 2014 (UTC)reply
Lead
The image of the staircase in the lead seems a bit large to me, would there be any opposition to shrinking it slightly?
Would the first sentence read more correctly if it was worded like so?: "Dutch brick is a type of brick made in the Netherlands, or similar brick, and an architectural style of building with brick developed by the Dutch."
Would it be more appropriate to refer to Britain as "Great Britain" here?
I think Britain also covers Ireland but I'll do it as suggested.
Rather than write "eastern states of America," would it be more accurate to say "colonies in North America"? This would encompass both British and Dutch colonies in the future United States, and would avoid using the term "state" as there were no "
U.S. states".
Changed to the colonies in the east of America.♦
Dr. Blofeld 15:20, 13 May 2014 (UTC)reply
Is it possible to find another source to support the fact that the word "brick" may have Dutch origins? This source is fine, but it will substantiate the claim further with a second internal citation.
In the second paragraph, should "twentieth century" be written as "20th century"? I'd suggest inserting a comma after "20th century".
As stated above, I suggest replacing "nineteenth century" with "19th century".
I disagree, it's a writing preference. An FA of mine passed recently using word form.♦
Dr. Blofeld 15:23, 13 May 2014 (UTC)reply
Paragraphs two and three utilize Janssen quite heavily. Are there any other substantiating sources that can be internally cited for some of this content?
There's nothing wrong with that I don't think, it's what we consider a reliable source.♦
Dr. Blofeld 15:28, 13 May 2014 (UTC)reply
The following sentence should be rewritten as following: Saint Michael's Castle, built in Saint Petersburg between 1797 and 1801 for the Emperor Paul I, is "an enormous quadrangular pile, of red Dutch brisk, rising from a massy basement of hewn granite." This seems to read better to me, but I'm open to other alternatives.
Changed as suggested.♦
Dr. Blofeld 15:32, 13 May 2014 (UTC)reply
I suggest removing "(1712–86)" after Frederick the Great as it is unnecessary here.
Again I don't it's needed and flows better as it is.♦
Dr. Blofeld 15:32, 13 May 2014 (UTC)reply
Should
European Union be wiki-linked here? It's not completely necessary, but some users may want to pop over to the article to research the organization's "competition authorities".
Suggest editing sentence to read "One house from the late 17th century in Dutch Court is built entirely of Dutch brick." I do have a question about the sentence though: is Dutch Court a street in Topsham? If so then the sentence should read "One house from the late 17th century on Dutch Court in Topsham is built entirely of Dutch brick."
Altered as suggested, thanks.♦
Dr. Blofeld 15:35, 13 May 2014 (UTC)reply
The lead states that Dutch brick was shipped to the United States as ballast, but the beginning of this section contradicts this by stating "bricks were not imported to the American colonies". When bricks were used as ballast, were they not counted as "imported" items?
The last sentence should read "The houses' brickwork incorporated various designs including spear shapes and a form like a
fleur-de-lis."
Reworded, almost as suggested.♦
Dr. Blofeld 15:51, 13 May 2014 (UTC)reply
Other Dutch colonies
I recommend beginning this section with some sort of lead in sentence such as "Dutch bricks and brickwork were also imported and utilized in other colonies throughout the
Dutch Empire in Asia, Africa, and the Caribbean". This is merely an example, but you see what I mean.
Added as suggested, agreed.♦
Dr. Blofeld 15:51, 13 May 2014 (UTC)reply
In the Fort Zeelandia paragraph, should the sentence be reworded "after the Dutch acquired Formosa from China as a trading colony."
Thanks @
Caponer: for your very thorough review, you picked up on a great deal of things! I don't agree on all, but the majority have been of much use, thankyou.♦
Dr. Blofeld 15:58, 13 May 2014 (UTC)reply
It was my sincere pleasure
Dr. Blofeld! Thank you for addressing all the above comments in such a thorough and expedient fashion! This article meets all criteria for Good Article status, and so I am proud to pass this article to GA! Great work! --
Caponer (
talk) 01:11, 14 May 2014 (UTC)reply
@
Caponer: Thanks, that review was exceptionally good, you've helped improve it considerably!♦
Dr. Blofeld 08:56, 14 May 2014 (UTC)reply