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You have not nominated a GAN for a while, therefore I believe you're deserving of a review for this one already! --
K. Peake 10:08, 15 January 2021 (UTC)reply
Kyle Peake, wow that was fast. Thank you for taking up this review. Happy to address the comments as always. :) --
Ashleyyoursmile! 10:36, 15 January 2021 (UTC)reply
Infobox and lead
Infobox looks good!
"is a song performed by" → "is a song by"
"intended to be a part of" → "intended to be included on"
"it was released on" → "the song was released on"
"the third track on Be." → "the third track on the album." since Be has only been referenced once up to this point
"pandemic-induced malaise" is not sourced in the body, only pandemic-induced loneliness
"also picked it as a" → "picked the song as a"
"Commercially, "Blue & Grey" became a," → "Commercially, the song became a,"
"and at number 9 on the" → "and number 9 on the"
"It entered the charts" → "It further entered the charts"
The number of countries listed in the above sentence is too much and reads like a supermarket list; instead, mention the number of them outside of the US it charted in and write "including Hungary and South Korea" afterwards or something similar that pinpoints two countries it charted highly in
Done all
Background and release
Img looks good, apart from the wikilink on BTS
Remove target on Be
Why are the producers ordered differently hear than in the lead?
thanks for noticing, I've switched the order --
Ashleyyoursmile! 18:33, 15 January 2021 (UTC)reply
Good move! --
K. Peake 19:04, 15 January 2021 (UTC)reply
"was originally slated" → "was initially slated" to avoid using "originally" early on in two consecutive sentences
The first teaser part is not mentioned by the source
Double-checked. It is backed up. --
Ashleyyoursmile! 18:33, 15 January 2021 (UTC)reply
My bad for missing it. --
K. Peake 19:04, 15 January 2021 (UTC)reply
"at the latter's studio where" → "at the latter's studio, where"
"together. "Blue & Grey" was" → "together; "Blue & Grey" was" since the two sentences need merging because they are too short currently
Change the last sentence to ""Blue & Grey" was released on November 20, 2020 as the third track on Be." or something similar, as it is delving into too much detail that the song was released for digital download and streaming as part of the album
Done
Music and lyrics
Add the Stereogum ref to the audio sample text since that backs up the soft part plus wikilink
pop ballad per MOS:LINK2SECT
"The lyrics address themes of" → "The lyrics address themes that include"
""Blue & Grey" is a" → "Musically, "Blue & Grey" is a"
"in the album," → "on Be" because it has been too long since you last wrote the title
"details" of the track and opined that it" → "details," and opined that it"
"vocal delivery which he" → "vocal delivery, which he"
"called the song "the" → "called it "the"
"off of Be" complimenting" → "off of Be," complimenting"
"on a ballad" acknowledging" → "on a ballad," acknowledging"
""crushing" praising BTS'" → ""crushing" while praising BTS'"
""touching" that" → ""touching" and said that it"
Done
Commercial performance
Remove Spotify info per
WP:CHARTS and also remove the second sentence since that will be irrelevant afterwards
Shouldn't South Korea come first because it is BTS' native country?
I'm keeping this ordering so that US and Canada chartings are mentioned together, followed by Europe, and then Asia. --
Ashleyyoursmile! 18:33, 15 January 2021 (UTC)reply
Yeah I suppose that works here. --
K. Peake 19:04, 15 January 2021 (UTC)reply
"sold over 69,000 units," → "sold over 69,000 units in the United States,"
On hold until all of the issues are fixed, but it is fresh to take one of your articles on again and this is a good effort! --
K. Peake 17:23, 15 January 2021 (UTC)reply
Kyle Peake, mostly addressed all issues. Could you check and tell me if I missed out any? Thanks.
Ashleyyoursmile! 18:33, 15 January 2021 (UTC)reply
Ashleyyoursmile I left responses for a few points; you only now need to remove "also" from the lead's critical reception and wikilink
pop ballad on the sample text. --
K. Peake 19:04, 15 January 2021 (UTC)reply
Ashleyyoursmile✓Pass now, looks like your timely responses have been consistent despite taking a break from nominating articles! --
K. Peake 19:42, 15 January 2021 (UTC)reply
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