Done. I don't know why I keep forgetting that!
Miyagawa (
talk) 18:07, 25 April 2013 (UTC)reply
" Vulcan government seek to make the Enterprise leave orbit so they can attack the Syrrannites" -- You should probably note the Syrrannites are a renegade faction of Vulcans hiding on their planet. This kind of detail is important since the lead is supposed to be so general.
" and afterwards the Andorians." -- here it might help to note they are longstanding enemies on the edge of war for awhile.
Added the above two into the lead.
Miyagawa (
talk) 18:07, 25 April 2013 (UTC)reply
"Plot" Might need a few highlights from the previous episode. It's sort of hard to follow as-written, even as someone who's seen both episodes and reviewed the first article.
I've added an additional paragraph to plot to summarise the earlier episode. I fully admit it hadn't occurred to me and I'll keep it in mind for future multi-part episodes (although its really only season four of Enterprise and most of DS9 that had differently named multi-part episodes in Star Trek).
Miyagawa (
talk) 18:07, 25 April 2013 (UTC)reply
"However, Archer continues to see the vision who informs him that he must find the Kir'Shara." -- You should explain what the Kir'Shara is.