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Reviewer: Rjjiii ( talk · contribs) 22:49, 16 January 2023 (UTC)
Opening Comments
I'll go through this article and leave a talk page message once I'm done with the initial review.
Prose
The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
At this time, a Japanese company named Nintendoreads really weird.
bootleg problem seen in Asiacould be mentioned earlier with the Famicom. Then there will be a logical flow from the issues to Nintendo's solution.
"reverse engineering, untainted by.
likewise suing Atarilanguage seems wrong. Would counter-suing be a better way to say this? Likewise doesn't really fit.
that Atari usedin the caption should be Atari, Inc. or it will read like shorthand for Atari Games.
including the Atari.should likely be omitted as confusing. Maybe mention Atari's failure to stop 3rd party games at the beginning of the section.
Manual of Style
It complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation:
List of all references
It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:
Inline citations are from reliable sources
All in-line citations are from reliable sources, including those for direct quotations, statistics, published opinion, counter-intuitive or controversial statements that are challenged or likely to be challenged, and contentious material relating to living persons—science-based articles should follow the scientific citation guidelines:
No original research
It contains no original research:
Looks good:
Needs work:
and hastening the decline of Tengen into its eventual bankruptcy.is not verified by Oxford. The phrase also doesn't make sense in the context of the article. The article says Tengen is a Subsidiary of Atari which continued to exist in the 90s.
Atari also sued Nintendo for seeking to monopolize the game business, but Nintendo was exonerated of any unfair business practices.This is not exactly backed up by the source. "Atari" is used as shorthand for Atari Games throughout the article. Atari Corp mentioned in the source is not Atari Games. After the North American Videogame Crash, Warner sold the unprofitable parts of Atari to Jack Tramiel and that was Atari Corp. Atari Games made arcade games, computer games, and console games. Atari Corp made 8-bit computers, 16-bit computers, home consoles, and the handheld Atari Lynx plus software for all of those platforms.
No copyright violations or plagiarism
It contains no copyright violations nor plagiarism:
The United States District Court for the Northern District of California consolidated the two cases.This is a direct quote. It needs to be rephrased rather than quoted.
The court further determined that Nintendo had proven a likelihood of success in their copyright infringement claim, because Atari made unauthorized verbatim copies of the 10NES code from the Copyright Office, and that Atari's Rabbit program was also substantially similar to Nintendo's 10NES.seems too close to this
Atari made unauthorized verbatim copies from the Copyright Office. In addition, the court ruled that Nintendo showed a likelihood of success in proving that Atari infringed the 1ONES copyright by copying the source code from the Copyright Office, and that the Rabbit program was substantially similar to the 1ONES.
Addresses the main aspects of the topic
It addresses the main aspects of the topic:
Focused on the topic
It stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style):
It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each ( WP:NPOV):
It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:
Copyright
Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content:
Relevant
Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
Discussion
There's a lot of small problems with this but they all look very fixable. I'll likely put this on hold. Feel free to message me if you have questions about any of the issues that I noted. Rjjiii ( talk) 22:49, 16 January 2023 (UTC)