This isn't an incredibly long article, but it looks comprehensive and well-researched. Just a few questions:
Plot sections generally don't need citations. Any particular reason why they are included here?
One New Zealand newspaper described the film as "screamingly funny". Name of the newspaper?
You talk about "Donald McCaffrey", "Christopher Jacobs", "Wes Gehring", "Gerald Mast", and "George King" in the reception section; since there's no wikilink for these people, you should give a brief description of who they are.
Are there alternatives for sources 35 and 36? They don't look incredibly reliable, but they're just being used to source the fact that the film appears on a particular DVD so it isn't that big of a deal. Still, something that looks a bit more reliable would be a bit better. Unless I have missed something.
In the External links section, you should be using the
Template:Internet Archive film instead of what you currently have going.
Cut the McCaffrey & Jacobs reference from the plot section. The Vitagraph Life Portrayals reference is the studio's summary of their own film's plot. I suppose it's probably not required, but I don't read the MOS as strictly forbidding such a reference, especially where a plot summary taken directly from the film might require some interpretation (which I'd tend to think a silent short would by its nature).
Thames Star now specifically named in the text.
I'll need a little bit to try to give context to the people who've written about the film without making this section any choppier than it probably already is. Let me see what I can do. Added descriptive clauses for McCaffrey and Jacobs and for King (whose name I know have right, mea culpa!). I've linked Gehring and Mast in lieu of describing them inline, I think both meet the notability threshold (clearly so in the case of Mast), and I'll see what I can do about getting at least a stub up for them.
Mast now has an article, although I hope to snag a few more sources and flesh it out a bit more. Still seeing what I can do for Gehring. Identified Gehring in text. He's written a couple dozen books, including for some very prestigious imprints, and he is (or was) a columnist for USA Today, so I suspect he should be notable, but sources aren't really forthcoming, and I'm not going to make a crappy BLP stub to avoid just describing him inline here.
I'd like to stand behind my use of Images. While university film studies resources are divided on whether it meets the standard of "scholarly" analysis, it's a reliable website with a publication policy and a permanent editorial staff, which meets our requirements for reliable sourcing. Also, several university programs (including BYU, for example) do recommend it as a resource for film and popular culture information; I think sourcing a VHS set's release date there should be accordingly acceptable. I think I have a print source for the DVD date, on the other hand ... let me get back on that. Reversing course on the DVD Journal link; I'm pretty sure its use is in line with consensus. It's
very widely used in the project, including in a host of GA-rated articles and
at least one Featured article.
I can certainly swap to the Internet Archive template if that's preferred (although I think documentation suggests I should use
Template:Internet Archive short film in this case); I didn't do so initially because its formatting doesn't match the widely-used IMDB template's formatting, and I felt that consistent presentation was more important than consistent use of templates. I can change that if its a problem, though.
Just found the Internet Archive template that matches the IMDB template I'm using (
Template:Internet Archive, obviously enough). So that's fixed now, too.
That's a first pass of responses. Let me see what I can do about the remaining concerns.
Squeamish Ossifrage (
talk) 15:44, 18 November 2013 (UTC)reply
I think this looks ready for GA now and will promote it soon, unless you have any questions. Taylor Trescott - my talk + my edits 21:49, 18 November 2013 (UTC)reply
I've certainly got no objections! I appreciate your review and assistance, and if you've got any other comments or questions, I'm happy to field those, too. I've got a few more sources on their way via interlibrary loan in an effort to make sure my literature survey is "comprehensive", so it'll still be a bit until I consider FAC for this (and I'm sure the prose will need a cleanup pass before then; hopefully, I'll have enough material to get Gehring an article by then, too).
Squeamish Ossifrage (
talk) 22:11, 18 November 2013 (UTC)reply
Well, I promoted it - nice work on this, and I hope to see more silent film articles from you. Taylor Trescott - my talk + my edits 22:32, 18 November 2013 (UTC)reply