I'd expand the Pottery section a little - a sentence or two to describe some of the salient features about the two pottery stages mentioned. A bit more added – please check.
...often by means of coiling, and pit fired - grammar fix needed. Changed wording.
Similarly the Metallurgy section. Anything else about the earliest copper use - smelting? Would be good. A bit more added – please check.
please use "around/about/approximately/roughly" for "c." or circa. - prosier.Agreed: changed wording or simply removed the abbreviation.
The Other cultural developments section - some of these could be expanded by a sentence or two. Moved things around a bit to deal with single sentence paragraphs which shouldn't have been there. Please see how it looks now and if more is needed.'
This section is a bit haphazard - reading the main articles, it looks as if
Tell Qaramel is a bit old and can be left out, while the others are alot more relevant - and it begs the question as to why we have lots on the Natufians and these ones are only touched upon..? e.g. the
Göbekli Tepe had amazing little bas reliefs
Cas Liber (
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13:44, 15 August 2019 (UTC)reply
Similarly the Environmental changes section.Human migration was the key legacy of the land bridge so have added something about that.
Do we know anything about the climate? was it the same or colder than now?Good point. Should have mentioned the Greenlandian which was a period of rising climate following the Younger Dryas.
Are there any centres of study for this millennium?I can't find anything specific as subjects like archaeology, geology, anthropology, stratigraphy, etc. tend to cover periods of several millennia. The sources used in the article have dated certain events to this millennium but they are interested in a much broader timespan.
Thinking out loud here, but maybe a section on how we know what we know? How is it studied? It is done by subject, really, a lot depending on archaeological finds but, as the opening paragraph says, all the dates are estimates mostly based on geological and anthropological analysis. I can expand that if you wish.
Anything on domesticated animals at this time at all (or lack thereof)?It's generally believed that the dog was domesticated but that was earlier and it's mentioned in
10th millennium BC. The cat first domesticated humans much later, in Egypt, when our usefulness became apparent, ha! (As you can tell, I live with a cat!) There was the early livestock mentioned in the article. Do you think an extra section would help or should I expand the agricultural one with more about animals?
I've answered all the points now although some may need to be taken further as indicated. Please read it again and see what you think. Thanks very much.
No Great Shaker (
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11:49, 15 August 2019 (UTC)reply
Okay, I have read this a couple of times as I think the order makes no sense. I'd move the Environmental changes to the top and call it "Setting" or something. The last para about humans really should be at the top of a Population and settlements section, which should be near the top and maybe include all the Other cultural developments items...?
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Casliber: Hello and thank you for the comprehensive feedback which will be useful when I can work on the article again. Unfortunately, I must abandon the site for the foreseeable due to illness at home. Will be in touch when I can return. I suggest you close this review as I will not be available any time soon. Thanks again and all the best.
No Great Shaker (
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09:32, 18 August 2019 (UTC)reply
Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with
suitable captions:
Overall:
Pass or Fail: - a real shame to close it now, but this can be re-opened later. I think we're not far off - a few issues that need to be researched and added and some reorganisation as noted above. Happy to re-review promptly if someone re-nominates
Cas Liber (
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13:54, 18 August 2019 (UTC)reply